Sprawdzi mi ktoś??? :))

Dear Sirs or Madams,
I'm writing to you in connection with kidnapped all the garden gnomes in our town. I'm a high-school student from Starachowice and I'd like to apologis for our behaviour.
Last weekend, we agreed a carnival party and then decided kidnap all the garden to their owners. In the evening we were going into each garden and took gnomes. Then we sent a picture of each gnome and a ransom note to the owners.
We kidnapped gnomes because we wanted to get annoyed people and we did it for fun.
A few days later, we realised that it wasn't a good idea. Now I think it was irresponsible.
On behalf of myself and other students I want to sincerely apologise to all the people behind our behaviour. I promise we'll all gnomes in the comming days.
Please accept my apologise.
Yours faitfully,
XYZ

Dear 'Sirs or Madams,' (Sir or Madam wystarczy)
I'm writing to you in connection with (brak przedimka) 'kidnapped' (zla czesc mowy) (brak slowa) all the garden gnomes in our town. I'm a high-school student from Starachowice and I'd like to 'apologis' (ortog) for our behaviour.
Last weekend, we agreed (tu brak 2 slowa) a carnival party and then decided (brak slowa) kidnap all the garden (brak czegos) 'to' (zle slowo) their owners. In the evening we were going into each garden and took (brak czegos) gnomes.
We kidnapped gnomes because we wanted to get 'annoyed people' (zla kol slow) and we did it for fun.
A few days later, we realised that it wasn't (brak slowa) a good idea.
On behalf of myself and other students I want to sincerely apologise to all the people 'behind' (zle slowo - o jaki tylek chodzi) our behaviour. I promise we'll (ale co?) all (brak chegos) gnomes in the comming days.
...apologIES

tyle źle???? jak ja już to oddałam do sprawdzenia z 2 poprawianymi błędami i dostałam piątke....maksymalna liczba punktów

to zle swiadczy o osobie wystawiajacej oceny
w Twojej wersji bylo troche dobrego angielskiego, ale tez troche powaznych bledow. Na jakim jestes poziomie?

Chodzę do 2kl liceum, za rok zdaje mature z angielskiego. Poziom niby średniozaawansowany. Ale ja sie chyba w niego nie zaliczam. Ten list pisałam sama, bez żadnego tłumacz google na przykład. Moja nauczycielka nie nadaje się na nauczyciela, nie potrafi uczyć i się nas boi.