Tylko ze wg mnie, to dzisiaj jest 3.X.2011 a nie jutro - no ale ty musisz miec inny kalendarz...
In my essay I would like to describe the advantages and disadvantages 'young married.' (tego nie rozumiem)
One of the main avantages of being a young married (Co? tutaj musisz napisac) is 'that' (po co to slowo tutaj? co ono dodaje?) independence because young people learn to manage their spending. 'Also' (dlaczego nie polaczyles tego zdania z poprzednim?) responsibility as they must make 'its' (o ludziach mowisz 'it'- wstydz sie-popraw) decisions and bear the consequences. Furthermore 'enlarge a family' (czy to jest rozkaz? do kogo?) because in a marriage when a child is born, it is the greatest happiness for the parents. Moreover (brak przedimka) presence of a person who loves (ale kogo? psa? kota? rybke?) most in the world because (brak przedimka) young man is aware 'that the world is the person' (tego calkowicie nie rozumiem) besides their parents who will do anything for him. What is more, (tutaj nie jest to jasne) love because recipe for a happy and long marriage is love.
Howewer there are disadvantages in becoming a young married (co? musisz zdanie dokonczyc).
Firstly Not enough free time for yourself becausewhen a child is born (ale kot? musisz napisac) has no time for his hobby. In addition 'to this poverty' (cos tu nie tak z tym zdaniem) , because young people have a lot of expenses, but they earn (brak slowa) little