Sprawdzenie rozprawki.

Cześć. W maju zdaję maturę na poziomie rozszerzonym. Nie zależy mi specjalnie na bardzo wysokim wyniku, chcę się po prostu sprawdzić. Czy ktoś z was mógłby mniej więcej ocenić, na ile punktów zostałaby wyceniona moja odpowiedź? Wzięłam temat z jednego z arkuszy z poprzednich lat dotyczący jedzenia gotowych posiłków i tych przygotowywanych w domu.

More and more people are trying to change their lifestyle. One of the most important thing is food, which we should choose very carefully. People have little time, so they prefer buy something at shop, than prepare meal by yourself.
The main advantage this choice is that we can buy everything, what we really need. It is very easy, additionally at shops is many produtcs in one place. It's comfortable for people, who work overtime, but very often we haven't got idea to lunch so we choose something prepared by other people.
Secondly, it's cheaper than buy ingredients, which are on shopping list.
But there are disadvantages too. For example, eating fast food is a bad choice for our body. It's junky and fatty food, which can leads to food poisoning or we can put on weight.
People should know what is the best way for them. Eating prepared food have good and bad sides, but we have to keep balance between fitnes fanatic and obese person.

More and more people are trying to change their 'lifestyle' (tutaj wg mnie ma byc l. mnoga bo mowisz o 'people'). One of the most important 'thing' (one of...thingS) is food, which 'we' (dlaczego akurat 'we' jak wczesniej mowislas o nieznajomych 'people') should choose very carefully. People have little time, so they prefer TO buy something at (tu brakuje przedimka) shop, than prepare (brak przedimka) meal by 'yourself' (calkowicie zle, tutaj mowisz o 'people'-l. mnoga).
The main advantage (tu brak slowa) this choice is that 'we' (zmien) can buy everything, 'what' (to jest kalka z polskiego 'co' ale jest zle, pomysl co w jez. ang tutaj dajemy) we really need. It is very easy, additionally at (brak przedimka) shops (brak slowa) 'is'(ale tutaj odnosz sie do 'products-to jest l. mn to czasownik tez musi miec l. mn) many produtcs in one place. It's comfortable for people, who work overtime, but very often we haven't got (brak przedimka) idea (tu brak 3 slowa) 'to' (zle slowo, tutaj FOR) lunch so we choose something prepared by other people.
Secondly, it's cheaper than 'buy' BUYING ingredients, which are on (brak przedimka) shopping list.
It's 'junky' (nie, napisz 'junk' co znaczy junk) and fatty food, which can 'leads' (dlaczego dalas tu 3os.l.poj, wystarczy LEAD) to food poisoning or we can put on weight.
Eating prepared food 'have' (zle slowo, tutaj HAS - food-has) good and bad sides, but we have to keep (brak przedimka) balance between (tu brak 2 slowa) 'fitnes' (blad ortog) fanatic and (brak przedimka) obese person.

Zrob cos z tymi przedimkami (a, an, the) - bo z tym to masz jeszcze problemy.