Czesc Terri:) Dziekuje za poprawienie!:) Juz bardzo wiele razy mi pomoglas, i jestem Ci za to bardzo wdzieczna:)
Wiedzialam, ze bede miec duzo bledow i literowek, bo pisalam to wszystko w pospiechu i nie przeczytalam juz 2 raz dla sprawdzenia. Ten tekst znow jest do profesorki Amerykanki. Poprzednie zadanie bylo dla Anglika, wiec jak widzisz, probuje sie jakos jezykowo dopasowac...
Czy po amerykansku nie bedzie poprawniej "programs" zamiast "programmes"? Moj WORD podkresla mi ta druga opcje jako niepoprawna...
"Each being need to be understood and loved which is impossible without communication and normal everyday talk about feelings as well as about non-significant matters." - w tym zdaniu chcialam napisac: Kazda istota potrzebuje byc kochana i rozumiana... Ale WORD podkreslil mi cale zdanie na zielono i kaze consider revising:( Nie wiem, co mogloby sie tutaj nie zgadzac...
Tutaj wklejam moja ostateczna wersje. Hoping it sounds OK now...
Lately Austria became known as a country with a fairly high drinking rate among young people. The recent statistics show that the irresponsible drinking behavior has dangerously increased over the past few months. Heavy or binge drinking problem is to be found not only in Austria, it can be also observed in the whole of the European Union.
In my opinion, drinking should be legally allowed only after a person’s 18th birthday and there should be much more emphasis on informing the youth about the possible consequences, illnesses and disabilities connected with consuming a large amount of alcohol.
In the majority of countries of the EU, 18 is the minimum age which allows a person to start drinking legally and in Austria it is enough to be 16. Nevertheless, there are more and more young people aged from 12 to 24 years old who drink heavily and well above the limit. They do it at a number of occasions, at home, college, frequent parties because it has become a part of their everyday life and they do not make allowances for the results and do not attach importance to their health. According to the European Commission, Europe has the highest proportion of drinkers in the world and the most popular consequences include numerous fatalities on the roads, higher risk of violent and aggressive behavior, crime, low productivity at work or school and even premature death as well as various disabilities. In one of the most recognized Austrian newspapers “Der Standard” such drinking results in problems with concentration and learning, fainting, and after longer and regular alcohol consumption depression and gastric diseases were mentioned. The situation in the area of the EU is very similar.
There were different solutions to this more and more common problem suggested. However, restrictions and limiting access to alcohol do not seem to be a reasonable way. Experience and history have shown that it does not work. It would provoke teenagers to drink even more. It would become so called “forbidden fruit”, a common object of desire. The only one restriction that should be introduced in Austria is drinking from the age of 18, as in my native country - Poland. Consequently, the best solution is not to forbid but to inform and enlighten. The most important thing is to know what health and other dangers can await both children and adults if they are drinking alcohol. Nowadays ignorance especially among young people is a very big ailment and that should be changed. Parents, teachers and media shall contribute in the society’s healing process. The first relevant step is conversation. Disturbance of interhuman communication must be removed because it is the main reason why people start to drink. "Each being need to be understood and loved which is impossible without communication and normal everyday talk about feelings as well as about non-significant matters."
The statistics show that 90% of the Austrian 16 years olds have already had serious trouble with alcohol. And these data are comparable to the EU. For that reason we should not forget that we bring children up and therefore we have an influence on shaping their personalities and characters. Informing of the younger part of the society should be everywhere for all to see. There are still too few educating programs to promote the awareness, health and which teach how to cope with various psychological problems and how to talk with others.
Taking into account the badly increasing number of drinking children serious measures should be considerated against it. If you are a person, who does not want to live in a sick society, just notice the problem and help your friends and family to understand it.
To sum up, the best solution for Austria would be to allow legal drinking and smoking from the age of 18 as well as much stronger emphasis on younger people’s education and development.