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Witam serdecznie, ponieważ mój angielski nie jest najlepszy, a muszę napisać tekst do slajdu na prezentację mojego wydziału, proszę was o sprawdzenie tekstu poniżej. Z góry bardzo dziękuję za odpowiedzi i poświęcony czas. :)

XXX department, as everything in the world has pros and cons, but it is scientifically proved that it has absolutely more advantages. XXX department, which was set up in 1977, belongs to one of the best and most entertaining department on the University of Warsaw . It undoubtedly makes up big forte of University. For this reasons compound many factors.
First one – facilities, building of the XXX Department is located in calm and picturesque part of Warsaw. It was built in 2004, has modern design and mostly consists of glass. All classes are new and equipped with modern technology and air-conditioning (which is helpful, especially during summer)
Not only is the location significant, but also the people you can meet there. Almost all of them, you can treat as a real shoulder to cry on. If you need help, you can turn to anybody with certainty obtaining it. Of course there are some exceptions, who like to be in-crowd, but mostly you can encounter huge hospitality of students, both younger and older, from all walks of life. What is more women are so beautiful. According to statistics, we can say, that more than half students of XXX Department make up women. Some of them think they are God’s gift to men, and don’t care about what’s up top, but mostly they are so intelligent, smart, cute and obviously really good-looking.
The stuff is also important. Almost all of the lecturers have very friendly attitude towards students. And it does not really matter, whether they are old or young, because if there are old (or even as old as hills) – they still remain young at hearts and when they are young – they are just old heads in young shoulders. Obviously all the lecturers have deep, profound knowledge and it makes them more useful for students. What is more the dean of XXX department is so enthusiastic when it comes to students. Although he is always busy, because of his job and the fact being high-flyer, he always finds time to talk with students – his duty hours starts from 20 pm. He is just ubiquitous!
When it comes to parties, there is no shadow of a doubt that XXX department organises the best parties in the world. Well-organised student government and great party community cause that every single party is the source of unforgettable memories.
Whatever bad you hear about described faculty, treat it as a hoax and humbug, don’t waste your time, take pot luck and enrol now! In stroke of luck you will become part of this extraordinary community.
It is imminent that XXX department will be the best in Poland – it just a matter of time!

XXX department, JUST as everything ELSE in the world has 'pros and cons' (prosze uzyj troche wiecej formalne okreslenia), but 'it is scientifically proved' (tego nie mozesz powiedziec, dlatego, ze zawsze znajdzie sie ktos, kto sie noe zgodzi z tym) that it has absolutely more advantages.
XXX department, 'which' (tego nie potrzeba) WASA set up in 1977 AND IT belongs to one of the best and most entertaining department 'on' (? AT) the University of Warsaw . It undoubtedly 'makes up big forte' (nie, nie tak - troche inaczej) of THE University. For 'this' (this odnosi sie do l. poj - a reasons to l. mnoga) reasons 'compound' (zle slowo) many factors.
First one - THE facilities, THE building of the XXX Department is located in
A 'calm' (moze peaceful?) and picturesque part of Warsaw. It was built in 2004, 'has' IS OF modern design and mostly consists of glass. All 'classes' (classes czy classrooms?) are new and equipped with modern technology and air-conditioning (which is helpful, especially during summer....tutaj bym dodala..as temperatures can reach....)
Not only is the location significant IN ITSELF, but also the people you can meet there (tutaj cos brakuje).
Almost all of them, 'you can treat' CAN BE TREATED as a real shoulder to cry on.
If you need help, you can turn to anybody with A certainty OF obtaining 'it' (ale czego?).
Of course there are some exceptions TO THIS, 'who like to be in-crowd' (cos tu nie tak), but mostly you 'can' (can czy actually? - wole bez can-bo to zmniejsza prawdopodobnosc) encounter huge hospitality of students, both younger
and older, from all walks of life.
What is more women are so beautiful (i to w jaki sposob ma pomagac?).
According to statistics, we can say, that more than half OF THE
students 'of' IN THE XXX Department ARE maDe up OF women. Some of them think they are God's gift to men,(a dlaczego nie?) and don't care about 'what's up top' (to jest kolokw - nie pasuje do powaznej prezentacji - troche inaczej), but mostly they are 'so' ('so' to znaczy ile? malo, duzo?) lepiej tego nie pisz) intelligent, smart, cute and obviously really good-looking.
The 'stuff' (zmien to slowo - calkowicie nie pasuje) is also important.
And it does not really matter, whether they are 'old or young' (jak zaczynasz takie slowa - to musisz wytlumaczyc, kiedy czlowiek jest 'young' a kiedy 'ild' - dla mnie to jest obrazajace), because if 'there' THEY are old (or even as old as THE hills- co niby maja 30 lat?) - they still remain young at hearT and when they are young - they 'are' (nie pisz 'are' bo to znaczy ze wszyscy i tak jest - lepiej - c...can be considered) just old heads 'in' ON young shoulders.

Obviously all the lecturers have deep, profound knowledge (ale czego?) and it makes them more useful for students. What is more the Dean of THE XXX department is so enthusiastic when it comes to students. Although he is always busy, because of his job and the fact OF being A high-flyer, he always finds time to talk with THE students - his duty hours starT from '20 pm' (takie cos nie istnieje - albo 8p.m. albo 2000 hours).

Well-organised student government and great party community 'cause' (zle slowo -tutaj lepiej ENSURE that every single party is the source of unforgettable memories.
Whatever bad (bad ale co?) you hear about THE described faculty, treat it as a hoax and humbug, don't waste your time, take pot luck and enrol now!
'In' BY stroke of luck you will become part of this extraordinary community.
It is imminent that XXX department will be the best in Poland - it IS just a matter of time!

Wielkie, wielkie dzięki za odpowiedzi :) Tak apropo stylu, to prezentacja ma byc pół żartem pół serio, więc dlatego użyłem tam takich okresleń, jakich użyłem.
Made by student for students!
Pozdrawiam.