Pomożecie? ;]

Nie wiem, jak prawidłowo napisać raport. Niestety jest to moją pracą domową. Coś wyskrobałam, jednak domyślam się, że jest on pełen niedociągnięć i niepoprawnego słownictwa. Gdyby ktoś zechciał sprawdzić ogólną zawartość i dodać coś od siebie, poprawić, będę bardzo zobowiązana. Jest to dla mnie niezmiernie ważne.


To: Share’s Market Branch Manager, Mr. S. Smith
From: Julia Bielecka, Share’s Market Human Resources Manager
Subject: Problems with Share’s Market’s staff and suggestions how to solve them
Date: 18th May 2008

INTRODUCTION
The purpose of this report is to outline the problems with Share’s Market’s staff and equipment and to present solutions to them.
STAFF PROBLEMS
I recently received a number of complains about the Market’s personnel. It is said that our staff’s behavior leaves a lot to be desired. All of the letters I obtained say about it being rude and passive to needs and suggestions of our clients. No initiative in dealing with difficult situations was underlined.
EQUIPMENT IMPROVEMENTS
It had been remarked that in one of our Market the problem with freezers appears. I suggest it to be immediately inspected. If the information is true, we shall verify why nobody informed us about this situation.
SUGGESTIONS OF SOLVING THE PROBLEMS
There is no need of replacing all the staff. Special skills training would be enough. As it had been emphasized in one of the letters – in many cases there are not enough senior members in the personnel. Young people treating working in our Supermarkets as a temporary job are not fully conscious about their responsibilities here. We should make them aware of them and show the way how to behave properly.
CONCLUSION
It should be remembered that our company has to have health, safety and happiness of our customers treated as our priorities.

>INTRODUCTION
>The purpose of this report is to outline the problems with Share's

skąd 'THE problems'? Czy czytelnik wie, o jakie problemy chodzi? Napisz 'outline current problems'


>I recently received a number of complains I suggest it to be immediately inspected.

Nie ma bezokolicznika po suggest. Uzyj zdania zaczynajacego sie od 'suggest that'

>SUGGESTIONS for SOLVING THE PROBLEMS
As it had been emphasized - czemu past perfect? Simple past


in one of the letters - in
>many cases there are not enough senior members in the personnel.
>Young people treating working in our Supermarkets as a temporary job
>are not fully conscious about their responsibilities here. We should
>make them aware of them and show the way [można wyrzucić the way] how to behave properly.
>CONCLUSION
our company has to have health, safety
>and happiness of our customers treated as our priorities.

skomplikowana gramatyka
our company has to treat .... as our priorities

Nie wiem, na jakim to ma byc poziomie. Mysle, ze na maturze rozszerzonej dalbym czworke (ok, wiem, ze nie ma stopni)

DZIĘKUJĘ!!
1 LO, ale obawiam się, że mojej nauczycielki to nie zadowoli na 4:P
ehh, ostatnio nauka angielskiego nie sprawia mi już takiej przyjemności, jaki kiedyś... Martwię się tym. :P
Ale BAAAARDZO DZIĘKUJĘ ZA POMOC :)