Proszę o sprawdzenie listu !

Temat przeniesiony do archwium.
Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie listu , a właściwie e-mail i prosiłbym o dopisanie paru zdań bo ma to mieć koło 12[tel]słów .

Dear Alan,
I'm sorry I haven't written for so long but I was very busy. At the beginning I was working as a driver but I changed my job because the atmosphere broke down in our work. I work in a restaurant "Ble ble" in the centre of Warsaw. My duties are: to deliver meal, stay at cash-desk and smile at customers. I feel very good in new job. I met three fantastic people there. My new e-mail is [email]
Best wishes,
XYZ