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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing enquire about job for web designer. I found advertisement on internet.

Some information about me:
- 3 years experience of design web pages and web applications,
- strong Photoshop experience,
- usability knowledge,
- A sense of humour!

Design is my passion. I would like to work with you, create good things and get experience. I will be delighted if you see my portfolio: www.xyz.pl.

I would appreciate a quick replay.

Your faithfully,
XYZ

przepraszam a gdzie sa przedimki? Czy ich nie lubisz uzywac?

I am writing TO enquire about THE job for A web designer. I found THE advertisement on THE internet. (straszna to dla mnie przyjemnosc co drugie slowo Ciebie poprawiac!)

3 years experience of 'design web pages' (zla kol slow) and web applications,
'usability' (co to niby za slowo jest?) knowledge,
(house, clothes? co? bo nie piszesz?) Design is my passion. I would like to work with you, create 'good things' (zmien to , bo to wyglada szmiesznie) and get experience. I will be delighted if you WOULD LIKE TO see my portfolio: www.xyz.pl. (czy naprzwde oczekujesz, ze przyszly pracodawca ma szperac po stronach internetowych, zeby sprawdzic kandydata?)
I would appreciate a quick 'replay' (zle slowo -popraw).
'Your' (slowo jest YOURS faithfully,