Sprawdzenie eseju

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Bardzo prosiłabym o sprawdzenie pracy. Temat : "Adolescence is the unhappiest time in most people's lives"

Everyone agress that adolescence is the unhappiest time in most people’s lives. One controversial question that people disagree on is whether young people really have more problems than older.
There are several advantages to be younger. Firstly, adolescent people have a rich social life, they are met with friends, go to party and do many interesting things. Another positive aspect of adolescence is join voluntary organizations and charities. Young people are more creative, full of ideas and positive energy. Further plus of young is open to other people’s problems. Young people don’t have to worry about down-to-earth problems like washing, ironing or vacuum.They are more tolerant of other cultures.

However, there are many arguments against adolescence. Firstly, they can easily fall into addictions. Young people smoke cigarettes and drink alkohol. Secondly, many people think that girls and boys invest affected problems. It is a lie. They havemany problems with school and depressed. Another negative aspect of adolescence is argue with parents. But perhaps the biggest disadvantage is heartbroken.

In conclusion , althought young people have many problems, they are enjoy for life. In my opinion adolescence is the best time In life.
Pamietam ze sprawdzalam cos podobnego nie tak dawno.

...people disagree on is whether young people really have more problems than older (ale older KTO? cats? dogs? people? - napisz).
There are several advantages 'to be' IN BEING younger. Firstly, adolescent people have a rich social life, they are 'met' (zle slowo) with friends, go to 'party' (tylko to jedna jedyna party, czy tu ma byc l. mnoga) and do
many interesting things. Another positive aspect of adolescence is
TO join voluntary organizations and charities.
Further plus of BEING young is BEING open to other people's problems. Young people don't have to worry about down-to-earth problems like washing, ironing or vacuumING.
Firstly, 'they' (to znaczy KTO?) can easily fall into addictions. Young people smoke cigarettes and drink 'alkohol' (ortog). Secondly, many people think that girls and boys 'invest affected problems' (tego nie rozumiem) .
They have many problems with school and BECOME depressed. Another negative aspect of adolescence is argue with YOUR parents. But perhaps the biggest disadvantage is BEING heartbroken.
In conclusion , 'althought' (ortog) young people have many problems, they are
'enjoy for life' (nie, nie tak, nie wiem co chcesz przekazac). In my opinion adolescence is the best time in ANYONES life.
Another negative aspect of adolescence is arguING with YOUR parents.
bardzo dziekuję. zastanaiwa mnie tylko czy na pewno "Your parents"? a nie na przykład "their parents"?
'invest affected problems' chodziło mi o coś w stylu "wymyślone, wyimaginowane, sztuczne problemy" . mozna by to jakoś inaczej zapisać?
okej poprawione. Jeszcze raz dziękuję.
'invest' - jest tutaj zlym slowem, to pochodzi od INVESTMENT- zakladania pieniedzy w cos zeby przynosilo zyski? 'affected' (zle slowo- calkowicie zle) problems
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