Prośba o sprawdzenie dwóch prac

Z góry dziękuję za wszelką pomoc. :)

1) I would like to work as a massagist because I want to help people. I think that this is a very prospective profession. People respect this occupation and they trust us when they come to us for help. When I see results of my job and patient's smile I am happy so I can help someone. Work with people is very interesting and satisfying. We can make a new relationship. I also think that is very rewarding profession.
Unfortunately, this job have many disadvantages too. It is hard manual work, in which we must use power of your muscular. If we want to be a massagist we should be patient and we should know that effests of this occupation may be back pain or problems with joints. We have to broaden your knowledges all time, what is connection with high costs.
All the same, I am very happy that I decide to become a massagiste.

2) When I have passed matura exam I had to make a hard decision - What I want to do in future? .I found announcement about massage school an I thought ''Why not?'' . I become a massagist by accident but I don't regret it. Every work have some advantages and disadvantages.
The main benefit of being massagist is contact with patient and feeling that I can help this person. In my opinion this profession is very rewarding and satisfying. Moreover, working time is flexiable.
This occupation also have some advantages. For example, it is hard manual work, which results may be problems with spine . In free time we must broaden your knowledges and take part in many courses, which are rich.
Despite a lot of disadvantages I am very happy that I decide to learn in massage school. The greater motivation for me is smile satisfied patient.

1) I would like to work as a 'massagist' (to jest zle slowo) because I want to help people. I think that this is a very 'prospective' (nie rozumiem uzycia tego slowa tutaj) profession. People respect this occupation and they trust 'us' (to niby znaczy kogo? mnie i Ciebie? czy wszystkich, tutaj nie jest jasno napisane) when they come to 'us' (popraw) for help. When I see (hello - czegos brakuje, przedimek) results of my job and (przedimek) patient's smile I am happy 'so' (zle slowo, tutaj 'that') I can help someone. 'Work' (zle slowo) with people is very interesting and satisfying. 'We' (to znaczy kto? ty i assistant?) can 'make' (zle slowo) a new relationship. I also think that (tutaj cos brakuje, 'to' ) is very rewarding profession.
Unfortunately, this job 'have' (dlaczego uzyles to slowo, 'jave' tutaj odnosi sie do 'job' - 3 osoba l. poj, zmien czasownik - dlaczegop trzeba to Tobie przypominac?) many disadvantages too. It is hard manual work, in which we must use (przedimek) power of your 'muscular' (calkowicie zle slowo). If 'we' (to znaczy ja i ty?) want to be a 'massagist' (popraw to slowo) 'we' (popraw) should be patient and 'we' (popraw) should know that (przedimek) 'effests' (blad ortog) of this occupation may be back pain or problems with joints. 'We' (popraw) have to broaden 'your' (calkowicie zle slowo) 'knowledges' ( a od kiedy to slowo ma forma l. mnogiej?) all (przedimek) time, 'what' (kalka z polskiego) is 'connection' (zlke slowo) with high costs.
All the same, I am very happy that I 'decide' (tutaj czas przeszly, bo decyzje podjales wczesniej) to become a 'massagiste' (popraw).

2) When I 'have' (niepotr) passed (cos brak) Matura (duza litera, to jest nazwa wlasna) exam I had to make a 'hard' (zle slowo, you make a 'difficult' an impossible' -decision. Prosze nie uzywac kolokw) What I want to do in future? .I found (przedimek) announcement about (przedimek) massage school 'an' (popraw) I thought ''Why not?'' . I 'become' (zla forma) a 'massagist' (popraw) by accident but I don't regret it. Every 'work' (tutaj nie tak, uzyj slowa 'job') 'have' (zla forma, tutaj 'has' bo odnosi sie do 3 os.l.poj - job) some advantages and disadvantages.
The main benefit of being (przedimek) 'massagist' (popraw) is (ja cos tutaj bym dala) contact with patient and (przedimek) feeling that I can help this person.
Moreover, working time is 'flexiable' (ortog).
This occupation also 'have' (ale tutaj 'occupation to jest 3 os.l.poj - dostosuj czasownik) 2 some advantages. For example, it is hard manual work, 'which results' (zmien to i nie mysl po polsku, bo nie tedy droga) may be problems with (brak cos) spine . In free time we must broaden 'your' (dlaczego akurat 'moje'?) 'knowledges' (popraw) and take part in many courses, which are 'rich' (zmien slowo).
Despite a lot of disadvantages I am very happy that I 'decide' (zmien) to learn in (przedimek) massage school. The greater motivation for me is (przedimek) smile satisfied patient.

"we" np odnośnie ogólnie ludzi pracujących w tym zawodzie, może być.

ja bym uzywala 'one' zamiast 'we'. To wszystko zalezy od stopnia formalnosci do ktorego ten tekst sie odnosi. Jak to jest do klasy VII, to jest o.k. ale wyzej to lepiej uzyc' one' albo' a professional'....j