prosze o pomoc;( please

Temat przeniesiony do archwium.
Oto mój speech na jutro, prosze o sprawdzenie:)

Utopia is an imaginary world where everything is perfect and does not need improvement. John Lennon in his song “Imagine” was took about future world, where people will live in peace and they will share all the world. They will not kill, worry about their future and divide the world into countries. So I think that nowadays people have similar hopes that author this song. Many military conflicts, poverty, envy, lack of work causing this world. Majority people are dreaming about peace and brotherhood – they think that the most significant are good relations with other people- love and friendship – like John Lennon. Part of us think that the important is when you do not have to worry about food and a place to live. Some people which caring about future of the world such as archivists are for example come true their dreams for preventing wars. Someone else form organizations such as Red Cross or foundation for humans who need help. All people have own private code according to which they decide which things are important and which are not. Similary John Lennon utopia choć tak różna, ale nie zmienna od wieków. is an essentional of live everyone.
>“Imagine" was took about future world
talked about future world(?)

>where people will live in peace and they will share all the world. They will not kill, worry about their future and divide
would live ... would share ... would not kill ... and divide (mowa zależna)

>...lack of work causing this world
o co chodzi? - musisz powiedzić co te wymienione rzeczy cause (lepszy będzie present simple)
np. ...lack of work cause great del of unhappiness in this world

>Majority people are dreaming
majority of people dream (znowu lepszy p. simple)

>most significant
może po prostu most important?

>like John Lennon.
like John Lennon thought. (dodałbym na końcu)

>Some people which caring about future of the world such as archivists are for example come true their dreams for preventing wars.
Some people that care about future of the world such as archivists realize their dreams about peaceful society

>choć tak różna, ale nie zmienna od wieków. is an essentional of live everyone
however different, but the same since centuries, is essential for everyone's life.

mam nadzieję, że jeszcze skorzystasz :)