sprawdzenie listu nieformalnego

Witam, chciałabym poprosić o sprawdzenie listu nieformalnego. Z góry dziękuję.

Dear Sara,

Thanks for your last e-mail. I'm sorry I haven't written for such a long time.

I'm writing to let you know that I'm going to England for winter holidays. Your town will organise a cultural festival and I want to take a part in this event.

I would be pleased if you give me some information about the festival. I'm interesting about date and time of the event. Another things I want to know are prices of tickets for exhibitions, concerts and shows. Can you recommend me some place where I can stay? I want to ask for places of interest in the neighbourhood and weather conditions of this time of the year.

Looking forward to hearing from you.
Lots of love,
XYZ

I'm writing to let you know that I'm going to England for (tu cos brakuje) winter holidays.
I'm interesting (jestem interesujaca? popraw slowo) about (brak przedimka) date and time of the event. Another 'things' (tutaj l. poj) I want to know are (brak przedimka) prices of tickets for exhibitions, concerts and shows.

I'm writing to let you know that I'm going to England for the winter holidays.
I'm interested about the date and time of the event. Another thing I want to know are the prices of tickets for exhibitions, concerts and shows.

Czy teraz OK? Dziękuję serdecznie :)

napisalabym ...I'm interested IN the date and time...

Dobrze. Dziękuję jeszcze raz.