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"Teenagers in Poland and the USA: how similar and how different are they?"

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Young people live in every country. But are they the same everywhere? There is number of similarities as also differences between teenagers in Poland and the USA.

There is no denying that our world is getting smaller. It became a global village. Information came to us with the speed of light. So it is the reason why Polish and American adolescents listen the same music, watch selfsame films and wear identical clothes. Thanks to Internet and television they know what is on top and trendy. What is more, teenagers spend their free time likely on meeting with friends, going to discos or cinema. Furthermore youth have similar plans and dreams for the future. We want to be happy, make a career and raise our own family.

On the other hand, there are some differences between us. First of all, we live in different cultures and appreciate various values. Secondly, Americans are more laid back because they do not have to cram and memorize stupid, useless formulas and rules. For that reason they have less stress at school. It is also true that in Poland young people are more addicted from their parents. In USA teenagers are more self-reliant and responsible. They get a job and earn their leaving earlier than youth in Poland.

In conclusion, I think that we have more in common than sharing us differences. Our worlds infiltrate and influence each other. But we must remember that no matter where we leaving, each of us is different and it is beautiful.

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Young people live in every country. But are they the same everywhere? (The same - meaning ??? do they have the same interests, hopes, dreams)
There is number of similarities AND differences between teenagers in Poland and the USA.
There is no denying that our world is getting smaller (Nie, 'the world' zawsze byl takiej samej wielkosci) tylko communications has made the world smaller. The world has becOme a global village. Information cOMES to us with the speed of light. (Tutaj potrzeba zdania, jak ta information przechodzi z jednego do drugiego kraju)
This is the reason why Polish and American adolescents (ile maja lat?)listen TO THE same music, watch THE self same films and wear identical clothes (chyba nie???). Thanks to THE Internet and television PROGRAMMES they know what is on top and trendy. What is more, teenagers ARE LIKELY TO spend their free time meeting friends, going to discos or TO THE cinema. Furthermore youth (youth to znaczy ile maja lat?) have similar plans and dreams for the future. We (dlaczego 'we' nic nie mowiles ze liczysz sie w tej grupie 'youth') want to be happy, HAVE a career and raise our own family (tzn children-bo family tez moze byc bez children)
On the other hand, there are some differences between us (tzn teraz do ktorej grupy nalezysz Polish or American?). First of all, we live in different cultures and appreciate various (nie, various-moze different?) values.
Secondly, Americans (aha, to ty jestes w tej Polskiej grupie) are more laid back because they do not have to cram and memorize stupid, useless formulas and rules (tzn inny system edukacji - tutaj przydalo by sie to rozszerzyc)
For that reason they have less stress at school (nie, oni maja inne stresy?). It is also true that in Poland young people are more addicted (addicted do czego? kogo? chyba masz na mysli 'dependant') ON their parents. In USA teenagers are more self-reliant and responsible. They get a job and earn their lIVING (leaving to znaczy cos innego - sprawdz) earlier than DO youth in Poland.
In conclusion, I think that we have more in common than 'sharing us
differences' (dlaczego 'us', moze than there are differences). Our worlds infiltrate and influence each other. But we must remember that no matter where we LIVE, (nie leaving), each of 'us' (moze each tennager, youth etc) is different and it is beautiful (co jest beautiful - fakt ze kazdy jest inny, to wtedy ..and THIS IS beautiful).
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