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California

The Americans call California "the Golden State". And it's true that people came here to look for gold and silver in the mountains. Now they come to see the great cities, the big parks and beautiful desert, the wonderful coast, or to enjoy Disneyland.

More than thirty million people live here, and million more visit the state every year. Of the fifty states of America, only Texas and Alaska are bigger than California. It's the home of Hollywood and the American film industry; of computers and California wines.
But 150 years ago it was just a land of desert and mountains. California is a sunny heaven on earth; it has sandy beaches, an ocean, high mountains, large cities, and forests. California is very large and too differentiated to get to know it well.

Los Angeles is the largest and most exiting city with it's a beautiful motorways, elegant districts fascinating by the richness and extravaganza. Los Angeles also accommodates many museums and other interesting places such as Disneyland, where you can shake hands with Mickey Mouse and Hollywood a symbol of dreams about the success, money and wealthy residences in Beverly Hills or Malibu.
Lying between the San Gabriel Mountains and the Pacific Ocean, Los Angeles is one of the world's largest cities and it is more than 10.000 square kilometers in size. The only way to move around easily is by car. You can stay a month and still not have time to see and do everything.

California is paradise on earth. When you go here you will have unforgettable holiday in your all live. You can visit San Francisco, where you will see a famous bridge, eat delicious fresh fish, and watch the street actors. In Los Angeles, you can visit the beach where they were filming Baywatch. It’s impossible to say about every attraction, you have to visit California, but you must remember that you won’t to get back home.
Prosze!! Czy ktoś mi tu moze pomóc!!
:'(
a w czym mozna ci pomoc, bo chyba to nie jest 'za krótkie wypracowanie do szkoły', prawda?
The Americans call California "the Golden State" and it's true that people came here to look for gold and silver in mountains. Now, they come to see the great cities, the big parks and a beautiful desert, the wonderful coast or to enjoy Disneyland.

More than thirty million people live here, and more than million tourists visit the state every year. Of( tu coś mi się nie podoba ale nie umiem poprawić) the fifty states of America, only Texas and Alaska are bigger than California. It's the home of Hollywood and the American film industry; of computers and California wines.
But 150 years ago it was just a land of desert and mountains. California is a sunny heaven on earth; it has the sandy beaches, ocean, high mountains, large cities, and forests. California is very large and too differentiated to get to know it well.

Los Angeles is the largest and the most exiting city with its the beautiful motorways, elegant districts fascinating by the richness and extravaganza. Los Angeles also accommodates many museums and other interesting places such as Disneyland, where you can shake hands with Mickey Mouse and the Hollywood symbol of dreams about the success, money and wealthy residences in Beverly Hills or Malibu.
Lying between San Gabriel Mountains and Pacific Ocean, Los Angeles is one of the world's largest cities and it is more than 10.000 square kilometers in size. The only way to move around easily is by car. You can stay a month and still have no time to see and do everything.

California is paradise on earth. When you go there you will have unforgettable holiday of your live. You can visit San Francisco, where you can see a famous bridge, eat delicious fresh fish, and watch the street actors. In Los Angeles, you can visit the beach where Baywatch is filmed. It's impossible to say about every attraction, you have to visit California, but you must remember that you won't want to get back home.


mam nadzije ze pomoglam
serdecznie dziękuje!! Bardzo mi pomogłaś!!
tekst nie jest za krótki moim zdaniem!!
- ...people came there... (we use 'here' for the places the speaker/writer is and 'there' for other places
- ...people live there... (unless you are one of them)
- ...among the fifty American states, only
- with its beautiful motorways ('its' is enough, without 'the' )
- richness of what? (I think wealth would be better)
- extravaganza = a large and impressive celebration or event
- extravagance = the extrime, unusual , or unreasonable quality of sth
- accomodate doesn't fit here, it would be better; there are many museums....and other... in LA
- you can spend there a month and...
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