prosze o poprawe pracy

Coraz mniej mlodych ludzi decyduje sie na zawarcie malzenstwa rokiem zyciem. Napisz rozprawke przedstawiajaca wady i zalety zakladania rodziny w pozniejszym wieku.
The less and less youngsters decide to legalize their relationship before age of thirties. There exist plenty of causes of this phenomenon for instance a rat race connected with work or achieving success among young people. Although is it better to be an old parent?
One point of view of being older parent is that this person is enough matured physically and psychological to set up a real family. Furthermore, it is well known that such persons achieved some possition in community and they have a great chance to create stabilisation and security not only economical but also family warm unlike to the young who are still learning and getting experience how to be an adult.
On the other hand, from medical point of view being a parent in older age can be dangerous both for mother and her child. The older mother is the higher chances to born an ill child. Moreover, age difference between parents and child often lead to generation conflict which has got a bad influence on whole family.
Personally I believe that is better to be a parent in younger age. Despite of fact, that it is very difficult to cope with all problems connected with having a child. It is a smaller risk to born disabled newborn. But the decision depends only on parents and they know exactly what it may bring them in the future.

'The' (niepotr) Less and less 'youngsters' YOUNG PEOPLE decide to legalize their relationship before THE age of 'thirties' 30 (albop mozesz ...before THEIR thirties - nie mieszaj). There exist plenty of causes of this
phenomenon for instance 'a' THE rat race connected with work or achieving
success. 'among young people' (tego nie trzeba).
'Although' (niepotr) Is it better to be an oldER parent?
One point of view of being AN older parent is that this person is 'enough
matured' (nie MATURE ENOUGH physically and psychologicalLY to set up a 'real' (a jakie sa 'unreal families?) family.
Furthermore, it is well known that such persons HAVE achieved some
'possition' (ortog) in THE community and they have a great chance to create
stabiliTY and security not only IN AN economical SENSE but also 'family warm' (co to jest?) unlike 'to' (niepotr) the young who are still learning and getting experience OF how to be an adult.
On the other hand, from A medical point of view being a parent in older
age can be dangerous both for THE mother and her child. The older mother
'is' HAS A 'the' (niepotr) higher chancE to 'born' (co to jest!!) GIVE BIRTH TO 'ill' UNWELL child. Moreover, THE age difference between parents and childREN often lead to generation conflict which has 'got' (niepotr) a bad influence on THE whole family.
Personally, I believe that IT is better to be a parent 'in' AT A younger age.
THIS IS despite 'of' THE fact, that it is very difficult to cope with all THE problems connected with having a child.
'It' THERE is a smaller risk 'to born disabled newborn' (po jakiemu to??) TO GIVE BIRTH TO A DISABLED CHILD.
But the decision depends only on THE parents and they know exactly what it may bring them in the future.

dziekuje:)

terri a znasz moze jakas ksiazke albo stronke gdzie moglabym poprawic writing?

Nie, nie znam takich ksiazek, ale napewno inni znaja.
Jak zdajesz ang. rozszer. to napewno sa ksiazki specjalnie na to.

Twoje bledy wychodza z tego, ze gdy uczylas sie od samego poczatku, to niektore rzeczy nie pojelas i dlatego one sie teraz pokazuja. Zastanow sie nad kazdym bledem i dlaczego to robisz. Ale najlepiej to pisz takie opisanki,(moze codziennie) i bedziemy poprawiac, z czasem bedziesz robila mniej a mniej bledow.

staram sie codziennie cos pisac i jestem ci bardzo wdzieczna ze to sprawdzasz:)tak zdaje rozszerz. a wychodza mi teraz braki z gimnazjum;/mam nadzieje ze dam rade je nadrobic do 5 maja;/