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Everyone agrees that adolescence is a very important time in young people’s lives. They have to make decisions which will have influence on their lives. Controversial question is opinion, that adolescence is the unhappiest time in most people’s lives.
There are a several defects of adolescence. A lot of young people often argue with their parents. They want to have more freedom for example young people love to come back late, but parents parents don’t allow them because they are afraid of them or parents require too much . Maturation is also the time of first love. Young people often suffer, sometimes they try to commit suicide, because their feelings are not understood and frequently ridiculed. Young people can easy fall into addiction. They smoke cigarettes and drink alcohol because they want to break away from their problems in school or in house.
However there are many advantages of adolescence. Youth discovers the world and make new friends. They are They are creative and full of positive energy. They usually have a carefree life because they don’t have to worry about their livelihood and their parents just want to their children well educate.(w sensie aby ich dzieci dobrze się uczyły). Another positive aspect of adolescence is join voluntary organizations and charities. Young people can develop their hobby and do different things like play the instruments. many people train different sports.
In conclusion, although adolescence has a negative side, it also can be a good thing. I think the most disanvatages of adolescence is that young people have to plan their life when they still do not know about it. The greatest advantage is that young people can live happily and enjoy life.

They have to make decisions which will have influence on their (mozesz dodac 'whole') lives. 'Controversial question is opinion' (nie za bardzo-popraw) that adolescence is the unhappiest time in most people’s lives.
There are 'a' (niepotr) several 'defects' (calkowicie zle slowo) of adolescence.
They want to have more freedom for example young people love to come back (ale gdzie?) late, but (brak slowa) parents 'parents' (niepotr) don’t allow them because they are afraid 'of them' (nie, tutaj FOR them) or parents 'require too much' (ale czego?) . 'Maturation' (nie za bardzo trafne slowo) is also the time of first love.
They smoke cigarettes and drink alcohol because they want to break away from their problems in school or in (brak przedimka) 'house' (nie, tutaj slowo 'home').
However there are many advantages of BEING AN 'adolescence' (zmien) . 'Youth' THE YOUNG discoveR the world and make new friends.
They usually have a carefree life because they don’t have to worry about their livelihood and their parents just want 'to' (niepotr) their children TO BE well educateD. Another positive aspect of adolescence is joinING voluntary organizations and charities. Young people can develop their hobby and do different things like play 'the' (niepotr) instruments. many people train different sports.
I think the 'most' (daj slowo 'greatest') 'disanvatages' (ortog) of adolescence is that young people have to plan their life when they still do not know (anything?) about it.

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