List formalny do wydziału komunikacji.

List formalny do wydziału komunikacji lokalnego urzędu miejskiego z wnioskiem o zmodyfikowanie istniejącego układu komunikacyjnego w Twoim mieście.

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing in connection with a current communication system. I think it is completely mistaken and I want to express my opinion about it.
First of all I want to express my dissatisfaction with an omission of some districts in the bus lines. It is necessary to have a fluent traffic in the whole town, not only in some sections.
What is more, there are an insufficient amount of buses in the evening. It is the time, when the most people, such me, need a transport – they finish work or even school, going to meet friends or do a shopping. I think you should increase a number of possible communication in the evenings. It is not only mine opinion, in an attachment you can see a questionnaire which I have done in our city.
I am using a public transport in other cities too, and even in a smaller towns the communication system is better than in ours.
Yours faithfully XYZ

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing in connection with 'a' THE current communication system. I think it is completely 'mistaken'(to jest zle slowo) and I want to express my opinion about it.
First of all I want to express my dissatisfaction with 'an' (zly przedimek) omission of some districts in the bus lines. It is necessary to have 'a' (niepotr) 'fluent' (zle slowo, tutaj FLUID) traffic in the whole town, not only in some sections.
It is the time, when 'the' (niepotr) most people, such (tu brakuje slowa) me, need 'a' (niepotr) transport – they finish work or even school, going to meet friends or do 'a' (niepotr) shopping. I think you should increase 'a' (zly przedimek) number of possible communicationS in the evenings. It is not only 'mine' (zle slowo) opinion, in 'an' (zly przedimek) attachment you can see a questionnaire which I have 'done' (nie, napisz wiecej formalnie slowa - 'carried out') in our city.
I am using 'a' (niepotr) (co to z tym 'a' jest?) public transport in other cities too, and even in 'a' (niepotr) smaller towns the communication system is better than in ours.

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing in connection with THE current communication system. I think it is completely 'wrong' and I want to express my opinion about it.
First of all I want to express my dissatisfaction with the omission of some districts in the bus lines. It is necessary to have fluid traffic in the whole town, not only in some sections.
It is the time, when most people, such as me, need transport – they finish work or even school, going to meet friends or do shopping. I think you should increase the number of possible communicationS in the evenings. It is not only my opinion, in the attachment you can see a questionnaire which I have carried out in our city.
I am using public transport in other cities too, and even in smaller towns the communication system is better than in ours.

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