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Tak skleciłam po polsku :)

Rok temu w wakacje byłam w pięknym miejscu. Pojechałam tam z moim chłopakiem. Paryż jest wielkim miastem, jest stolicą Francji, a ludzie tam są bardzo przyjaźni.
Położony jest nad rzeką Seine. Zatrzymaliśmy się w hotelu de Crillon. Jest to jeden z najstarszych hoteli w Paryżu. Nigdy nie mieszkałam w tak ekskluzywnych warunkach. Korzystałam ze SPA i basenu. Jedzenie było świetne i bardzo smaczne. Pogoda była wietrzna i ciepła, czasami było deszczowo.
Jedną z atrakcji turystycznych w Paryżu jest muzeum Louvre. Podziwiałam tam prace sławnych artystów. (prace art., work czy jak? ). Najpiękniejszym obrazem dla mnie był obraz Leonardo da Vinci “Mona Lisa”
Następną atrakcją turystyczną jest Katedra Notre Dame. Zobaczyłam tam ogromne witraże and 2 olbrzymie wieże, które mają 130m wysokości. Oglądałam ją wieczorem, widok był niesamowity, ponieważ katedra była pięknie oświetlona. Warto również zobaczyć Wieżę Eiflla. Ma ona 334 metry wysokości. Obejrzałam z niej cała panoramę miasta. Widok z Wieży Eiffla był wyjątkowy. Czułam jak gdybym unosiła sie w powietrzu. Następnym zabytkiem jest Panteon. Widziałem tam wahadła Foucalta i groby francuskich bohaterów. Ta oryginalna budowla była kiedyś kościołem, obecnie pełni funkcję świeckiego mauzoleum.
Bardzo lubiłam spacerować po parku Monceau. Jest to duży park. Znajduje się tam wiele gatunków roślin, były one czarujące. Było tam bardzo kolorowo i pięknie pachniało kwiatami.
Paryż jest najpiękniejszym miejscem w jakim kiedykolwiek byłam. Chciałabym pojechać tam jeszcze raz. Nigdy nie zapomnę spędzonych tam chwil, ponieważ była to dla mnie niesamowita przygoda.

a tak po angielsku :) (widać że bardzo się męczyłam :)?
Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie i poprawienie błędów z góry dzięki :)

One year ago on holiday I was in the beautiful place. I go there with my boyfriend.
Paris is very big city, it is capital of France, and people there are very friendly.
It is situated on the river Seine. We stayed in a Hotel de Crillon. This is one of the oldest hotels in Paris. I never lived in such exclusive terms. I used the SPA and swimming pool. Food was great and very tasty. The weather was windy and warm, sometimes was rainy.
One of the tourist attractions in Paris is museum Louvre. I admired interesting work famous artists. The most beautiful for me was picture Leonardo da Vinci “Mona Lisa”.
Next tourist attractions is Notre Dame Cathedral. I saw there huge stained glass and two enormous towers, they have 130 meters height. I watched her in the evening, the view was amazing, because the cathedral was beautifully illuminated. Worth also a visit Eiffel Tower. She has a 334 meters height. I saw (I tu nie wiem ) a vast panorama of the city. The view to the Eiffel Tower was unusual. I felt like I was floating in the air.
Next monument is Pantheon. I saw there of pendulum Foucalta and the tombs of French heroes. It was originally built as a church, now functions as a secular mausoleum.
I really liked the walk with my boyfriend in the Parc Monceau. It’s a big park. There was many different kind of plants, they was charming. There was very colorful and beautiful flowers smell.
Paris is a most beautiful place I have ever been. I would like to go there again. I never forget the moments spent there, because this was an incredible adventure for me.

Nie pisz najpierw po polsku, dlatego, ze twoj jezyk polski jest na wiele wyzszym poziomie jak twoj jez. ang i z tego wychodza sztuczki. Pisz od razu po ang uzywajac slowa ktyore znasz.

One year ago on holiday I was in 'the' (zly przedimek) beautiful place. I 'go' (zle slowo) there with my boyfriend.
Paris is very big city, it is (brak przedimka) capital of France, and people there are very friendly.
We stayed in 'a' (zly przedimek) Hotel de Crillon.
I (tu brakuje slowa) never lived in such exclusive 'terms' (to jest calkowicie zle slowo) . I used the SPA and (brak przedimka) swimming pool. (brak przedimka) food was great and very tasty. The weather was windy and warm, sometimes IT was rainy.
One of the tourist attractions in Paris is 'museum Louvre' (tak tego nie piszemy). I admired interesting work (tu brak slowa) famous artists. The most beautiful for me was (brak przedimka) picture (brak slowa) Leonardo da Vinci (brak przedimka) “Mona Lisa”.
(brak przedimka) next tourist 'attractions' (dlaczego masz tu l. mn jak piszesz tylko o jednym) is 'Notre Dame Cathedral' (zla kol slow-popraw). I saw there huge stained glass and two enormous towers, they 'have 130 meters height' (nie, tego tak nie piszemy...were 130m tall). I watched 'her' (ale kogo? o jaka kobiete tu chodzi?) in the evening, the view was amazing, because the cathedral was beautifully illuminated. ALSO worth 'also' (niepotr) a visit (tu brakuje czasownika) Eiffel Tower. 'She' (ale ta 'tower' nie jest osoby zenskiej - popraw) 'has a 334 meters height' (napisz tak jak Ci pokazalam wyzej). I saw A vast panorama of the city. The view 'to' (to czy 'from') the Eiffel Tower was unusual. .
(brak przedimka) next monument is (brak przedimka) Pantheon. I saw there of 'pendulum 'Foucalta' (czy ten czlowiek mial tak na imie? zdrobnilas po polsku, popraw, i masz zla kol slow) and the tombs of (brak przedimka) French heroes. It was originally built as a church BUT now functions as a secular mausoleum.
There 'was' (ale to ma pasowac do 'plants'l. mn) many different kindS of plants, they 'was' (popraw) charming. There was (brak przedimka) very coloUrful and beautiful 'flowers smell' (zla kol slow, co tutaj napisalas to kwiatki smierdza).
Paris is 'a' (zly przedimek) most beautiful place I have ever been TO.
I (tu cos brakuje) never forget the moments spent there, because this was an incredible adventure for me.

Czy Ty lub ktoś inny mógłby mi podpowiedzieć jakie wstawić te brakujące słowa? Bardzo dziękuję za poprawienie tych błędów. Przepraszam, że proszę o uzupełnienie, wiem że powinnam zrobić to sama i pomyśleć ale mam dzisiaj jeszcze bardzo dużo pracy. Pozdrowionka :)

Bardzo proszę o pomoc, to ważne

Uzupelnij text z poprawkami ktore sa samowytlumaczalne. Np. wiesz jak jest liczba mnoga od 'was' i czym zastapic 'she' dotyczace wiezy i jezeli pisze ze jest zly przedimek to powinnas wiedziec czym zastapic, prawda?
Wklej "poprawiony" tekst i jest szansa ze ktos zajrzy.

Starałam się poprawić wg. wskazówek. Nie wiem jednak o jakie brakujące słowa chodzi. Czy mógłby ktoś wyeliminować resztę błędów. Z góry dziękuję.

One year ago on holiday I was in a beautiful place. I went there with my boyfriend.
Paris is very big city, it is a capital of France, and people there are very friendly.
We stayed in the Hotel de Crillon.
I (tu brakuje slowa-nie wiem co tu wstawić ) never lived in such exclusive conditions. I used the SPA and a swimming pool. the food was great and very tasty. The weather was windy and warm, sometimes IT was rainy.
One of the tourist attractions in Paris is Louvre Museum .I admired interesting work (tu brak slowa również nie wiem o jakie słowo chodzi ) famous artists. The most beautiful for me was a picture (brak slowa- ?) Leonardo da Vinci a “Mona Lisa”.
The next tourist attraction is Cathedral Notre Dame. I saw there huge stained glass and two enormous towers, they were 130m tall. I watched it in the evening, the view was amazing, because the cathedral was beautifully illuminated. Also worth a visit (tu brakuje czasownika-jakiego?) Eiffel Tower. It was 334m tall.. I saw A vast panorama of the city. The view from the Eiffel Tower was unusual.
The next monument is a Pantheon. I saw there of Foucaulta Pendulum and the tombs of a French heroes. It was originally built as a church but now functions as a secular mausoleum.
There were many different kinds of plants, they were charming. There was a very colourful and beautiful smell flowers.
Paris is the most beautiful place I have ever been to.
I (tu cos brakuje) never forget the moments spent there, because this was an incredible adventure for me.

No to już chyba ostateczna wersja, byłby ktoś tak miły i sprawdził już dla świetego spokoju mego sumienia:)?

One year ago on the holiday I was in the beautiful place. I was there with my boyfriend.
Paris is a very big city and the capital of France. people were very friendly.
We stayed in the Hotel de Crillon.

I have never lived in a such exclusive hotel. I used the SPA and the swimming pool. The food was great and very delicious. The weather was windy and warm, sometimes it was raining.
One of tourist attractions in Paris was Louvre Museum. I admired an interesting work famous artists. The most beautiful thing was the picture Leonardo da Vinci “Mona Lisa”.
The next tourist attraction was Cathedral Notre Dame. I saw there the huge stained glass and two enormous towers, they were high(tall tylko do osób podobno :) ). 130m of height I was watching it's in evenings, the view was amazing, because the cathedral was amazing illuminated. Worth visiting was also the Eiffel Tower. It was high, 334m of height. I saw the vast panorama of the city. The view from the Eiffel Tower was unusually.
The next monument was a Pantheon. I saw there the Foucaulta Pendulum and the tombs of a French heroes. It was the original building but now it functions as a secular mausoleum.
I really liked the walk with my boyfriend in the Parc Monceau. It’s a big park. There were many different kinds of plants, which were charming. flowers were very colourfully and beautiful smell.

Paris is the most beautiful place I have ever been to.
I have never forget the moments which I spent there. this was an incredible adventure for me.

No to już chyba ostateczna wersja, byłby ktoś tak miły i sprawdził już dla świetego spokoju mego sumienia:)?

One year ago on the holiday I was in the beautiful place. I was there with my boyfriend.
Paris is a very big city and the capital of France. people were very friendly.
We stayed in the Hotel de Crillon.

I have never lived in a such exclusive hotel. I used the SPA and the swimming pool. The food was great and very delicious. The weather was windy and warm, sometimes it was raining.
One of tourist attractions in Paris was Louvre Museum. I admired an interesting work famous artists. The most beautiful thing was the picture Leonardo da Vinci “Mona Lisa”.
The next tourist attraction was Cathedral Notre Dame. I saw there the huge stained glass and two enormous towers, they were high(tall tylko do osób podobno :) ). 130m of height I was watching it's in evenings, the view was amazing, because the cathedral was amazing illuminated. Worth visiting was also the Eiffel Tower. It was high, 334m of height. I saw the vast panorama of the city. The view from the Eiffel Tower was unusually.
The next monument was a Pantheon. I saw there the Foucaulta Pendulum and the tombs of a French heroes. It was the original building but now it functions as a secular mausoleum.
I really liked the walk with my boyfriend in the Parc Monceau. It’s a big park. There were many different kinds of plants, which were charming. flowers were very colourfully and beautiful smell.

Paris is the most beautiful place I have ever been to.
I have never forget the moments which I spent there. this was an incredible adventure for me.

Zabierasz sie za wypracowanie za trudne na Twoje umiejetnosci bo robisz podstawowe bledy.
Bylas na wakacjach z chlopakiem a wszystko zwiedzalas SAMA. To niema sensu
in such AN ...
spa
THE Louvre Museum.
I admired SOME interesting work BY famous artists.
The most beautiful ONE was ...
The next place I went to, was Notre Dame Cathedral.
There I saw A huge stained glass WINDOW
tall tylko do osób podobno - nieprawda, tall mozesz uzyc do osob i budynkow, high nie mozesz uzyc do osob.
po kropce. They were 130 meters in height.
To tylko niektore poprawki

Nie mi się przyśnił ten temat. Zawsze słabo szło mi pisane wypracowań, bo nauka angola polega na robieniu testów. Po raz 1 spotkałam się na tym forum z kimś tak "mało życzliwym", nazywając to delikatnie. OGROMNIE zatem dziękuję za poprawienie NIEKTÓRYCH błędów, które jeszcze ostatnio miały byś wszystkimi :)
Pozdrawiam resztę użytkowników forum.

Ale pominmy tego "angola", wciaz mysle ze jezeli spedzasz wakacje z KIMS to powinno byc WE went, WE saw, WE admired etc. zamiast I, I, I obojetnie w jakim jezyku piszesz. I jak ktos by mi uwage zwrocil ze przykladowo Faucalta /pendulum/ jest imieniem 'spolszczonym', to w Google bym znalazl i bym napisal poprawnie.

Akurat takie przeoczenie, że zamiast WE pisałam I to nie zbrodnia, jak ktoś zwrócił mi uwagę o pisowni tego imienia to jakby nie było widać poprawiłam:)
A napisałam "angola", ponieważ uważam, że niestety tak, nauczyciele/ wykładowcy (oczywiście nie wszyscy, tylko Ci z którymi miałam styczność) traktowały to właśnie w ten sposób.
Ps A gdybym nie miała z tym kłopotu, to chyba nie szukałabym pomocy na forum prawda?
Pozdrawiam

At night, the cathedral all lit up looked amazing.
It is 334m high.
The view of the city from the tower was spectacular.
... the Pantheon ...
There I saw the Faucalta Pendulum ...
of a French heroes
I really enjoyed the walkS with my boyfriend in the Parc Monceau. /zmien kolejnosc/
The many different kinds of plants were charming.
The flowers were colourful and they smelled beautiful.