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From: Oscar , Regional Sales Manager
To: Dixie Stewart, Marketing Manager
Cc: A. Edwards, Product Manager, J. Holland, Marketing Assistant
Bcc: Carol Watkins, Marketing Director
Sent: 10 December 2011_15:00
Subject: Brand Identity.
Attachment: Agenda of brand identity improvement.


Dear Sir Dixie Stewart
Last week I have heard very interesting interview with one of the most successful manager ,who cooperate with our rival in the market. He spoke about the brand identity and about, associated with this issue, corporate identity. I agree entirely with his attitude to this issue and I want to carry out implementation majority of his solutions. That is very serious problem in our company, because we have conducted visual audit, which means interviews and analyses on company products, and the result of that audit are disturbing. Meanwhile, we have examined public opinion and the results also are bothering. Only 40 percent of respondents could recognize our brand and indicate properly our products. I have conducted the meeting with my cooperators with the brand identity as the main topic. We have decided that the best way for improve our brand is to prepare and implement the new strategy of advertising our products to achieve better results. Manager from the interview told interviewer that there are some challenges, which company must face. Task for Yours Department in the nearest two weeks is prepare report about problems with our company identity. In this report should be attached three various solutions to this adverse situation, which You will present on the next board meeting.
More information about Yours task is included in attachment to this e-mail, so You should acquaint with that document. If You have any problems with that task, let me know as soon as possible.

Yours faithfully,
Oscar,
Regional Sales Manager
Dear 'Sir' (czy Dixie ma tytul 'Sir' bo jak tak, to zapomniales napisac u gory, ja mysle, ze nie) Dixie Stewart
Last week I 'have' (niepotr) heard (przedimek) very interesting interview with one of the most successful managerS, who 'cooperate' (3os.l.poj -manager-he) with our rival (tylko jeden rival?) in the market. He spoke 'about' OF 'the' (niepotr) brand identity and 'about' (niepotr), associated 'with this' (niepotr) issueS SUCH AS corporate identity. I agree entirely with his attitude to this issue and I want to 'carry out' (niepotr) 'implementation' IMPLEMENT (przedimek) majority of his solutions. 'That' (nie wiem do czego to sie odnosi?) is (przedimek) very serious problem in our company, 'because' AS we have conducted (przedimek) visual audit, 'which means' (niepotr) INCLUDING interviews and analyses on company products, and the resultS 'of that audit' (niepotr) are disturbing. Meanwhile, we have ALSO examined public opinion and the results 'also' (niepotr) are 'bothering' (poszukaj inne slowo). Only 40 percent of respondents could recognize our brand and indicate 'properly' (wg mnie niepotr) our products. I have conducted 'the' A meeting (ale lepiej...I have met) with my 'cooperators' (zle slowo) with the brand identity as the main topic. We have decided that the best way for (przedimek) improveMENT OF our brand is to prepare and implement 'the' (zle slowo) new strategy of advertising our products to achieve better results. (przedimek) 'manager from the interview' (mozna 'interview manager - ale nie wiem co to ma znaczyc) told (przedimek) interviewer that there are some challenges, which (przedimek) company must face. Task for 'Yours' (mala litera i 'your') Department in the nearest two weeks is (brak slowa) prepare (przedimek) report about (przedimek) problems with our 'company' (napisz 'corporate') identity. 'In this report should be attached' (napisz to inaczej, troche 'stronger' - This report should include) three various solutions to this adverse situation, which 'You' (mala litera) will present 'on' DURING the next board meeting.
More information about 'Yours' (mala litera i 'your'-twoj) task is included in (przedimek) attachment to this e-mail, so 'You' (mala litera, zawsze piszemy mala litera w srodku zdania) should acquaint (ale kogo? napisz) with that document. If 'You' (mala litera) have any problems with 'that' THE task, 'let me know as soon as possible' INFORM ME IMMEDIATELY.

Yours 'faithfully' (nie, jak zwracasz sie do kogos przez imie i nazwisko, to Yours sincerely, Jak przez 'Sir-to Yours faithfully),

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