Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie dwóch esejów głównie pod względem gramatycznym

I:

What does it means to be a celebrity? This question can be answered in many different possibilities – being a celebrity can be a great thing, but can also bring a lot of troubles to your life. Let’s check advantages and disadvantages of being famous.

What is most common people desire which celebrity have? Fame! Or love or adoration or cult etc. When you are famous you have it all, and then you can achieve anything. You can be even a President of most powerful country in the world and change this world. The best example here is Ronald Regan who was an actor and moved his fame from show business to political support and became a 40’th President of the United States.
Second advantage of being famous is the fact that celebrities have an extraordinary life about which we – “mortals” – can only dream. Limousines, parties, big houses everywhere in the world – this is what they call “everyday life”. They (in the outstanding majority) don’t have to worry about the fact that they can lose a job (their agents are doing it).
However, in the other hand fame can destroy us. Our celebrity life can ruin our personality, relations with friends, family – and in the worst case – can kill us. Famous people have bigger potential to fall into addictions, e.g. to drugs, and then if they don’t kill you, you can kill yourself because of them.
The famous people generally complain on the lack of the privacy. It’s not easy to be “god” in the TV and internet age when every small mistake can be noticed – this situation can cause the psychological problems.
Taking everything into consideration, I think that it is better to be famous and have extraordinary than regular problems. “In an age without religion, celebrities are our new gods” said Norman Mailer, so who you want to be? Mortal human or immortal god?


II:
Being a celebrity is great – this is probably the opinion of most people. But I don’t agree with this and I will present you why.
What is worst is that from being a private person, you become public property – everyone knows you and think that you are his friend, it must be a strange feeling when you can’t go for walk without being photographed and everybody in the street is staring at you.
People are cruel, they have no mercy, and they show no shame. They will always examine and judge you, no matter what had you done. You must always be prepared for a flash of flashes.
Of course there are positive aspects of being famous – you can change the world, you can have the life about most of people dreaming. Gaining women, money, power and every regular actions are becoming easier.
But imagine that you are a rock star or a famous writer, and you have everything about people dreaming, but you don’t know who your real friend is, and who is with you just for money.
In conclusion, I think that being famous is a bad thing, celebrities don’t have normal lives, they just dreaming. You cannot enjoy the little things when you have everything - and whether not better to have less but to be pleased with it more than was more?

Będę bardzo wdzięczny, pozdrawiam!

This question can be answered in many different 'possibilities' (zle slowo) – being a celebrity can be a great thing, but can also bring a lot of troubles to your life. 'Let’s check' (czy to jakis rozkaz? -) advantages and disadvantages of being famous.

'What is most common people desire which celebrity have? ' (co - tego zdania nawet nie rozumiem...)
Or love or adoration or cult 'etc' (a co to jest to 'etc' bo tez CHCE go miec) .
You can 'be even' (zla kol slow) a President of (przedimek) most powerful country in the world and change this world. The best example here is Ronald Regan who was an actor and 'moved' (zle slowo) his fame from show business to 'political support' (zrob to inaczej) and became 'a' (jakie tu znowu 'a', wiemy, ze THE-bo tylko jeden moze byc 40tym) '40’th' (40th) President of the United States.
Second advantage of being famous is the fact that celebrities have an extraordinary life about which we – “mortals” – can only dream ABOUT.
They (in the 'outstanding' (zle slowo) majority) don’t have to worry about the fact that they can lose a job (their agents are doing it).
However, 'in' ON the other hand fame can destroy us.
Famous people have 'bigger' (nie, to jest nieladne slowo tutaj, daj 'greater') potential to fall into addictions, e.g. to drugs, and then if they don’t kill 'you' (nie, tutaj wyglada ze 'famoius person ma zamiar mnie akurat zabic - musisz to zdanie zmienic), 'you' (nie mozesz mowic 'you' jak mowisz o 'nich') can kill yourself because of them.
'The' (niepotr) Famous people generally complain 'on' (to jest kalka z polskiego 'na' tutaj ABOUT) the lack of 'the' (no i po co to 'the' tutaj?)i privacy. It’s not easy to be (brak przedimka) “god” in the TV and internet age when every small mistake can be noticed – this situation can cause 'the' (niepotr) psychological problems.
n an age without religion, celebrities are our new gods” said Norman Mailer, so who (cos tu brak) you want to be? (brak przedimka) mortal human or (brak przedimka) immortal god?


II:
Being a celebrity is great – this is probably the opinion of most people. But I don’t agree with this and I will 'present you' (nie, nie rob to tak - lepiej 'illustrate') why.
'What is worst' (nie zaczelabym, tego zdania tak,) is that from being a private person, you become public property – everyone knows you and think that you are his friend, it must be a strange feeling when you can’t go for (a przedimek?) walk without being photographed and everybody in the street is staring at you.
They will always examine and judge you, no matter what 'had you done' (zla kol slow).
Of course there are positive aspects of being famous – you can change the world, you can have the life 'about most of people dreaming' (cos tu nie taK). Gaining women, money, power and 'every regular' (nie, zmien to - ) actions are becoming easier.
But imagine that you are a rock star or a famous writer, and you have everything 'about people dreaming' (zmien to - ), but you don’t know who your real friend is, and who is with you just for money.
In conclusion, I think that being famous is a bad thing, celebrities don’t have normal lives, they (tu cos brak) just dreaming. You cannot enjoy the little things when you have everything - and whether (tu brak 2 slowa) not better to have less but to be pleased with it more 'than was more' (tego nie rozumiem)?

kochanie, cos z tymi przedimkami (a, an, the) jest - musisz sie za to porzadnie wziasc.