list prywatny, sprawdzenie, o koncercie

Zadanie: Byłaś ostatnio na koncercie. Napisz list do kolegi z Londynu, w którym:
- poinformujesz, na jakim koncercie byłaś i gdzie się odbył.
- napiszesz o problemie jaki miałaś ze zdobyciem biletu i jak go rozwiązałaś.
- opiszę zachowanie artystów podcas koncertu i wyrazisz opinię na temat organizacji imprezy.
- napiszesz o reakcji widowni i o tym na jaki cel artyści przekazali część dochodów z koncertu.

Dear Tom
Thanks for your letter. It was great to hear from you after such a long time!
Last Friday I've been to a great concert in Warsaw. My favorite band was playing there: Red Hot Chilli Peppers. At first I couldn't get my tickets because they were all sold out! Fortunately I saw an notice in the internet that someone is selling there ticket! I was happy, because I really wanted to go to that concert.
The band was really great, thay had a good connection with the audience and made many funny jokes. The organization of the concert wasn't that good because there aren’t parking place 5 hours before the concert!
I think the audience really liked the concert, I heard many people say that it was the best performance they had ever seen. The Wombats are very generous and gave half of the money they earned to a charity which is collecting money for poor children in Africa.
Please write to me about it and tell me what you’ve been up to.
All the best
XYZ

Zadanie: Byłaś ostatnio na koncercie. Napisz list do kolegi z Londynu, w którym:
- poinformujesz, na jakim koncercie byłaś i gdzie się odbył. ODHACZONE
- napiszesz o problemie jaki miałaś ze zdobyciem biletu i jak go rozwiązałaś. ODHACZONE
- opiszę zachowanie artystów podcas koncertu i wyrazisz opinię na temat organizacji i mprezy. ODHACZONE
- napiszesz o reakcji widowni i o tym na jaki cel artyści przekazali część dochodów z koncertu.

Dear Tom
Thanks for your letter. It was great to hear from you after such a long time!
Last Friday I''ve been' (why P.P? napisałeś/aś last Friday - jest skonkretyzowane) to a great concert in Warsaw.

My favoUrite (UK) band was playing there: Red Hot Chilli Peppers.

'At first' (mamy zawsze at first..., but... wyrażamy kontrast, tu nie ma kontrastu) FIRST I couldn't get 'my' (niepotrz) THE tickets (przecinek) because they were all sold out!
Fortunately (przecinek) I saw 'an' (dlaczego 'an' ?) notice 'in' (inny przyimek) the 'internet' (daj to z wielkiej litery) that someone 'is selling there' (piszesz o przeszłości) WANTED TO SELL THEIR OWN ticket! I was happy, because I really wanted to go to that concert.
The band was really great, they had a good 'connection' (znajdź lepsze słowo) with the audience and made many funny jokes. The organization of the concert wasn't that good because there 'aren’t' (opowiadasz o przeszłości, keep the tense, please) parking placeS 5 hours before the concert!


itd. Spojrzałem na to bez okularów (dopiero co wyszedłem spod prysznica). Ufam, że wszystko dostrzegłem.

skad to zerżnięte?

grudziu -
>>>>>Spojrzałem na to bez okularów (dopiero co wyszedłem spod prysznica). Ufam, że wszystko dostrzegłem.
...Niekiedy dajesz 'too much information'. W mojej wyobrazni juz widze Ciebie nagiego, woda powolusienku spadajaca po twoim ciele.... i z ta 'image' bede musiala walczyc przez caly dzien....:-)

Let's not let ur imagination run riot :)

Dziękuję za poprawki. Oto list po ich naniesieniu:

Dear Tom
Thanks for your letter. It was great to hear from you after such a long time!
Last Friday I was to a great concert in Warsaw. My favourite band was playing there: Red Hot Chilli Peppers. First I couldn't get the tickets, because they were all sold out! Fortunately, I saw a noticeat the Internet that wanted to sell their own ticket. I was happy, because I really wanted to go to that concert.
The band was really great, thay had a good contact with the audience and made many funny jokes. The organization of the concert wasn't that good because there weren’t parking place 5 hours before the concert!
I think the audience really liked the concert, I heard many people say that it was the best performance they had ever seen. The Red Hot Chilli Peppers are very generous and gave half of the money they earned to a charity which is collecting money for poor children in Africa.
Please write to me about it and tell me what you’ve been up to.
All the best
XYZ

Co ma Tom rozumowac przez IT?

to napiszę: "Best wishes" ;)

Mozesz ujac w sensie 'co myslisz o tym /co ci napisalam/ np.

Thanks for your letter. It was great to hear from you after such a long time!
Last Friday I was to a great concert in Warsaw. My favourite band was playing there: Red Hot Chilli Peppers. First I couldn't get the tickets, because they were all sold out! Fortunately, I saw a notice 'at' (nadal inny przyimek) the Internet that A PERSON wanted to sell their own ticket. I was happy, because I really wanted to go to that concert.
The band was really great, thEy had a good contact with the audience and made many funny jokes. The organization of the concert wasn't that good because there weren’t parking place 5 hours before the concert!
I think the audience really 'liked' lepiej: ENJOYED the concert. I heard many people say that it was the best performance they had ever seen. 'The' (niepotrz) Red Hot Chilli Peppers are very generous and gave half of the money they earned to a charity which 'is' WAS (jeśli ta org. zawsze zbierała pieniadze i zbiera dalej, to wówczas "collects/raises" ) collecting money for poor children in Africa.
Please write to me about 'it' (to, co fui napisał, nie wiadomo, do czego odnosi sie to 'it') and tell me what you’ve been up to.
All the best
XYZ