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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's s development while others think that is important for children to go to school.
Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

We are learning whole our lives but the most important part of it is when we are young. From ages we believed that good educations connects with good schools but is it still important? Maybe there are examples from the past that shows that desire of knowledge is more important than the prestigious schools and academias. In this essay I will discuss is teaching children at home is best for their development.
We can show some examples from history people who were educated in home, a polish writer Stanisław Ignacy Witkiewicz whose father decided that school destroys individuality, organized for sun home education. Another names we can call here are Alexander Graham Bell inventor, home schooled by his mother or Franklin D. Roosevelt 32nd President of the United States, home schooled by parents and private tutors. Due to their envolwment in literature, technological development and politics profs this type of education can arise great minds.
There are also many fears, parents face while taking decision does their children should be home educated. While taking part of school system children meets their colleagues, learn functioning in society, meets many opportunities by taking parts in competitions and events. Home schooled children can omit this possibilities, can have less friends. We should be cautious in organizing their time to not isolate them in houses.
Quite new way of understanding home schooling is e-learning that helps to provide education for all people who would like to learn but because of some reasons they can't go to a course. We observe how school learn children using new tools like tablets and computer it's almost on-line teaching which shows that we could do this same in friendly home space. Then only obstacle here is parents knowledge in using technology to lead children through this way of educating.
All in all we can say home schooling have some advantages and this advantages. There are profs from history that people schooled by this way can be real thinkers, that changes roads of human history. What we should notice is that parents should carefully scheduling children's time and show them what they can experience in schools in general not only in classes. Worth of notice is e-learning that can changes idea of schools becauase we can at virtual school, any-time.

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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's 's' (niepotr litera) development while others think that is important for children to go to school.

We are learning (przedimek) whole (brak slowa) our lives (przecinek przed 'but') but the most important part of it is when we are young. From 'ages' (nie rozumiem uzycia tego slowa) we believed that good 'educations' (nie, tutaj tylko 'education') 'connects' (nie, daj tutaj 'is connected') with good schools (przecinek) but is 'it' (tutaj nie jest jasno, czy to odnosi sie do 'connection' czy 'education' napisz jasniej) still important? Maybe there are examples from the past that 'shows' (nie, 'examples shoW) that (przedimek) desire 'of' (zle slowo, tutaj 'for') knowledge is more important than the prestigious schools and academias. In this essay I will discuss (tutaj brakuje slowa) 'is' (niepotr) teaching children at home is best for their development.
'We' (to znaczy kto? ty? ja? pisz bezosobowo) can show some examples from history (brak slowa) people who were educated 'in' (zle slowo, napewno kalka z polskiego, tutaj AT) home, (tutaj brakuje pare slow, 'np.') a 'polish' (duza litera) writer Stanisław Ignacy Witkiewicz whose father decided that school destroys individuality, (tu brakuje 2 slowa ' o on') organized for (brakuje 'jego') 'sun' (calkowite zle slowo, tutaj 'syna') home education. 'Another' (zle slowo, tutaj Other) names we can 'call' (zle slowo, moze ujsc 'recall') here are Alexander Graham Bell (przedimek) inventor, home schooled by his mother or Franklin D. Roosevelt (przedimek) 32nd President of the United States, home schooled by (brak slowa) parents and private tutors. Due to their 'envolwment' (blad ortog) in literature, technological development and politics 'profs' (blad ortog) THAT (brak slowa) this type of education can arise great minds.
There are also many fears(,) (po co tu jest przecinek?) THAT parents face while taking decision (ale jaka? musisz to wyraznie napisac) 'does' (calkowicie zle slowo) their children should be home educated. While taking part 'of' (co to z tym slowem? uzywasz jego blednie) school system children 'meets' ('meets odnosi sie do 3os.l.poj, a 'children' taka osoba nie sa) their colleagues, learn functioning in (dalabym przedimek) society, 'meets' (jak wyzej) many opportunities by taking 'parts' (daj. l. poj) in competitions and events. Home schooled children can omit 'this' (tutaj musi byc l. mnoga tego slowa) possibilities(,) (nie dawaj przecinka jak wymieniasz tylko jeden przypadek po nim) can have 'less' (nie, to jest zle slowo, daj tutaj 'fewer') friends. We should be cautious in organizing their time (tyutaj brakuje 2 slowa) 'to not' (zla kol slow) isolate them in (musisz napisac czyj to dom jest) houses.
Quite (przedimek) new way of understanding home schooling is e-learning that helps to provide education for all people who would like to learn but because of some reasons they can't 'go' (dalabym 'attend' i wtedy niepotr 'to';) to a course. We observe how school 'learn' (calkowicie zle slowo, [pamietaj, teacher teachers, pupil learns) children using new tools like tablets and computer it's almost on-line teaching which shows that we could do 'this' (zle slowo, daj tutaj przedimek) same in (przedimek) friendly home space. Then (przedimek) only obstacle here is parents knowledge in using (przedimek) technology to lead children through this way of educating.
All in all we can say home schooling 'have' (nie, tutaj 'schooling' jest l. poj) some advantages and 'this' (tutaj l. mnoga, bo masz 'advantages') advantages. There are 'profs' (poszukaj dokladnie jak pisze sie to slowo) from history that people schooled by this way can be 'real' (mozna uzyc slowa 'great') thinkers, that 'changes' (zle slowo, to odnosi sie do tych 'great thinkers') roads of human history. What we should notice is that parents should carefully 'scheduling' (zle slowo) children's time and show them what they can experience in schools in general not only in (tutaj dalabym moze slowo 'formal') classes. Worth of notice is e-learning that can 'changes' (nie, poszukaj co piszemy po modalu) idea of schools 'becauase' (nie, masz tutaj blad ortog) we can (ale co? musisz napisac) at (przedimek) virtual school, any-time.

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