Sprawdzenie krótkiego wypracowania

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Witam,
Zaznaczam, że mój poziom angielskiego jest jeszcze słaby, więc zapewne w tekście jest sporo błędów:

Day like everyday
It was usual day like everyday. I got up at 8:30 AM, I took the shower and as usual I ate musli on the breakfast. My mini-break, after I became an engineer, is slowly ending up so I must start work soon. Can be said it’s my first lazy month for several good years. What the heck! I still have time to work hard and earn a great deal of money, ultimately work as software developer is something special. Moreover I don’t belong to these idiots who graduate IT studies without any passion to programming, I should succeed. It’s a safe bet. After dinner I went for a walk with my friend on our old, good the old town. Suddenly, among the dozens of few interesting people I saw her - pretty blonde in red dress coat. I felt a mixture of fear and curiosity. Second feeling won, so I decided to follow her. The miss in red was talking the phone passionately, so like a true gentleman I decided to not break her and wait until the end of the conversation. After about five minutes I was still following her. Finally she ended and stopped at the bus stop. I thought: “now or never”. I came to her and told that I like her and I want to get to know her. I had been waiting before she ended conversation so I told her about it. Girl told me that she was talking with her fella. First I thought: “Fu..”, but I still was in high spirits. We were talking for 5 minutes and I said goodbye to her.
The end

Z góry dziękuję za pomoc ;)
up
Może popracuj trochę. Moim zdaniem to jest napisane po polsku, ang słowami.
Np.
I ate musli on the breakfast
Can be said it’s my first lazy month for several good years.
without any passion to programming
I decided to not break her - użyj inne słowo w znaczeniu: w sensie przeszkodzić
Itp
edytowany przez Aaric: 22 mar 2015
gdy opowiadamy cos co sie zdarzylo w czasie przeszlym, to trzeb uzywac slow w czasie przeszlym.
Jak zawsze brakuje przedimkow (a, an, the).
I decided not to interrupt her / get a word in edgeways

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