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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for the position of babysitter children on holiday camp in the mountains which you advertised on your website.

I am 20 years old and come from Kielce. I am studying pedagogics at university so a job children as a babysitter would be connected with my interests and education. I also have experience in this kind of work. I have previously worked as a babysitter, taking care of children mostly under 10 years of age. Personally, I enjoy babysitting and I plan to be a kindergarten teacher after graduating .
I am a suitable candidate for the position because I have all skills which are useful in a childcare . My personality is another advantage. I am a friendly and helpful person who likes working with people. I am also well-organised.

I can be contacted on [tel]at any time.
Thank you for considering my application, I look forward to hearing from you
Yours faithfully
XYZ

I am writing to apply for the position of 'babysitter children' (zla kol slow) 'on' (zle slowo, to jest po prostu kalka z polskiego) (brak przedimka) holiday camp in the mountains which you advertised on your website.

'I am 20 years old and come from Kielce' (nie rozumiem po co to? czy to nie bedzie w CV?). I am studying pedagogics at (brak przedimka) university so a job 'children as a babysitter' (pomysl o tym, tu pomieszalas kolejnosc slow) would be connected with my interests and education.
'I am a suitable candidate' (to czy jestes czy nie, to nie zalezy od ciebie ale od nich, lepiej...I think, I assume - cos lagodniejszego) for the position because I have all (przedimek) skills which are useful in 'a' (niepotr) childcare .
(jest przyjete, ze to zdanie pisze sie w osobnym akapicie) I look forward to hearing from you.

Czy na tym website użyto babysitter?
Na kogoś kto się zajmuje dziećmi na holiday camp to się mowi camp counselor.
Babysitter, to wtedy gdy rodzice chcą mieć wieczór dla siebie np. iść do kina itp i potrzebują kogoś żeby pilnować dzieci w ich domu.
Czy nie jest tak?;)