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Zdań ma być 8-10. Ja napisałam:
I wake up at 6 o’clock. After that I go to the bathroom where I take a shower and do make up. Later I get dressed, wake up my fiancé and then I prepare breakfast for us. Next we go to work and we are there till 3 pm. I am sales representative and my fiance is welding instructor. We come back to home usually I learn or do my homework andmy fiancé prepare dinner. In free time We listen to music and rest, sometimes meet with friends.
(w ostatnim zdaniu chciałam napisać, że wolny czas spędzamy razem z narzeczonym i zazwyczaj odpoczywamy słuchając muzyki lub spotykamy się z przyjaciółmi.ale nie umiem :))
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Czy tak jest dobrze?
I wake up at 6 o’clock. After that I go to the bathroom where I take a shower and put on make-up. Later I get dressed, wake up my fiancé and then I prepare breakfast for us. Next we go to work and we are there till 3 pm. I am a sales representative and my fiancé is a welding instructor. When we come back home usually I do housework or learnt, but my fiancé prepares dinner. In free time we listen to music and rest, sometimes meet with friends.

After that I go to the bathroom where I take a shower and put on (tutaj mozna dodac slowo 'my') make-up. When we come back home usually I do (tutaj brakuje przedimka 'the') housework or 'learnt' (zle slowo, tutaj 'learn'), 'but' (nie za bardzo trafne slowo, wg mnie to wyglada tak, ze ty robisz swoje a on bardzo grzecznie robi to, daj inne slowo, moze 'while') my fiancé prepares dinner. In (tutaj cos brak, moze 'our') free time we listen to music and rest, sometimes (moze daj tutaj 'we') meet with friends.

i jeszcze jedno zdanie.
In the evening We watch TV and I go sleep about 11 p.m

czemu we duza?
at about

Teraz poprawnie:
1. I wake up at 6 o’clock.
2. After that I go to the bathroom where I take a shower and put on my make-up.
3. Later I get dressed, wake up my fiancé and then I prepare breakfast for us.
4. Next we go to work and we are there till 3 pm.
5. I am a sales representative and my fiancé is a welding instructor.
6. When we come back home usually I do the housework or learn while my fiancé prepares dinner.
7. In our free time we listen to music and rest, sometimes we meet with friends.
8. In the evening We often watch TV and I go sleep at 11 o'clock

about 11 p.m - około 23?

A twoj narzeczony ogląda tv całą noc?

Czy tak może być?
In the evening I spend time with my fiancé, we often watch TV and We go sleep at 11 o'clock