Pomoc w sprawdzeniu

Witam!
Proszę o pomoc w sprawdzeniu pracy, z góry dziękuję. Polecenie brzmi następującą:
Imagine you received Angela's message asking about a friend of yours. Wrote an email to answer it. Plan what you're going to write using the paragraph headings Below.

Hello dear,how are you? I am going to tell you about my friend. Her name is Ankita. She lives in India. She is 16 years old, like we. She has got one older sister - Mohita. Ankita is studying in high school, in future she wanna become a docotr. She says it is a good job because you can help other people, even save a life. She is a great friend. Although there is a time difference between us (4,5hours) we talk quiete much. We chat everyday and whenever we got any problem, we help each other. She is really beautiful girl with oriental beauty. She is very ambitious as well. She likes going for shopping, travelling, singing and painting. She post me a picture she painted.It is avesome, she really got a tallent. I didn't find out anything bad about her. She is just perfect for me. Hope you can meet herone day. :)
I hope also to see you soon. Take care :) Kisses.

Hello 'dear' (nie za bardzo trafne slowo jak pisane do rowniesnika, musisz poszukac cos innego), how are you?
She is 16 years old, like 'we' (nie, to jest zle slowo.)
Ankita is studying in high school, in (brak przedimka) future she 'wanna' (nie uzywaj tego slowa, to jest kolokw - street talk, a nie to, co sie pisze) become a 'docotr' (blad ortog. Zawsze sprawdz wszystkie zdania, zanim je oddasz do poprawienia).
Although there is a time difference between us (4,5hours) we talk 'quiete' (znowu blad ortog ale i tak to jest zle slowo) much.
She is ( przedimek) really beautiful girl with oriental beauty.
She likes going 'for' (nie, to slowo jest niepotr...you go shopping, she goes shopping) shopping, travelling, 'singing and painting' (przed tymi slowami musisz cos dodac, bo nie mozemy miec ...she likes going singing..). She 'post' (zly czas, tutaj jest czas przeszly) me a picture she painted. It is' avesome' (ortog), she really (tu brakuje slowa) got 'a' (niepotr) 'tallent' (ortog). I 'didn't' (tutaj masz zle, pomysl o 'have') find out anything bad about her.
Hope you can meet her one day.

Uwazaj na literowki, bledy ortog - niema zadnej przyjemnosci tego czytac z bledami, ktorych tam nie powinno byc.
I hope also to see you soon. Take care :) Kisses.[/quote]

Hello dear,how are you? I am going to tell you about my friend. Her name is Ankita. She lives in India. She is 16 years old, like weUS. She has got one older sister - Mohita. Ankita is studying in high school, in PRZEDIMEK future she wanna< -TO JEST ZBYT SLANGOWE SLOWO, NAWET JAK NA LIST NIEFORMALNY become a docTOR. She says it is a good job because you can help other people, even save a life. She is a great friend. Although there is a time difference between us (4,5hours) we talk quiete< -ORTOGRAFIA much. We chat every day and whenever weONE OF US HAS got any problem, we help each other. She is PRZEDIMEK really beautiful girl with PRZEDIMEK oriental beauty. She is very ambitious as well. She likes going for shopping, travelling, singing and painting. She post< --NIEGRAMATYCZNE me a picture she painted.It is avesome< -ORTOGRAFIA, she really got a tallent< -ORTOGRAF. I didn't find out anything bad about her. She is just perfect for me. Hope you can meet herE one day. :)
I hope also to see you soon. Take care :) Kisses.

also in front of verb with exception of be

Ja bym nie użył quite z much. Zmień 'much' na inne słowo;)