Miałam napisać swój pierwszy essay. Mam nadzieję, ze mi pomożecie sprawdzić to zadanie.
Polecenie: Some people believe that doing sport at school is a distraction from more important work. Write an essay in which you give your opinion about this issue and propose ways for students without causing problems for their studies.
Some people believe that doing sport at school is a distraction from more important work. I will try to give my own opinion and to propose ways for students to do more sport at school without causing problems for their studies.
In my opinion the teenagers have in school very much science, so they do not like sports. They often learn, for example, for the exam instead to do sports. Some young people prefer to run, play football or ride a bike, but then they do not have time to study and their evaluation (oceny?) become worse.
In order to tackle, a number of measure are necessary. I believe that it is unrealistic to restrict the sport for more important work. What I propose instead is that they can do sports for health 3 times a week, one hour. The rest of the days, they should to learn and do their homework. What is more, teenagers may restrict the use of mobile phones. Then they will have more time to sport and study.
To conclude, people should organize their time so that they can enjoy their sport and work. It seems to me that the measures I propose will begin to remedy the situation.
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