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Media development is the reason of increasing a number of famous people. If the children grow up in a popular family, they will have some facilities and hardships. Although there are many advantages of being a child of popular parents, there are also some disadvantages.
The main advantage of being a child in a famous family is the fact that a child will grow up in a rich family. Lack of money can be hard to overcome, but if you live in prosperity, you will have more possibilities in the future career. Under no circumstances must the child work, because its parents will have got a well-paid job in mass-media. Moreover in such a family the child can be popular without too much effort. The children of celebrities have better opportunities to make first steps in show business, because they inherited skills and the mass-media likes photograph and write articles about family of famous people.
The main disadvantage of being the child in the famous family is invasion of privacy. Journalists like write articles about the children of famous people what is very irritating. For example, when you go to the restaurant with parents, they will be asked to make an interview with them by journalists. Moreover, the famous parents can be the reason of some problem in school. The child can be lonely and it can have got difficulties with accommodation in school society. Scandals and rumors spread by mass media about its parents can be a reason of a lack of friends.
Having considerate both sides of arguments, being a child in a famous family has got a lot of advantages and disadvantages. I definitely share the view of the supporters of this opinion although it has god also bad sides.

Media development is the reason of increasing 'a' (zly przedimek) number of famous people. If 'the' (tutaj mozesz to zmienic na 'their' i wtedy bedzie jasno o co chodzi) children grow up in a 'popular' (nie, zmien to slowo) family, they will have some 'facilities' (zle slowo, facilities to generalnie to co jest w lazience) and hardships. Although there are many advantages of being a child of 'popular' (poszukaj inne slowo) parents, there are also some disadvantages.
Lack of money can be hard to overcome, but if you live in prosperity, you will have more possibilities in 'the' (zly przedimek) future career. Under no circumstances 'must' (zle slowo) the child work, because its parents will have got a well-paid job in mass-media.
The children of celebrities have better opportunities to make first steps in show business, because they (tutaj cos brakuje, np 'have') inherited skills and the mass-media 'likes photograph' (tego calkowicie nie rozumiem, napisz to tak, zebym zrozumiala) and write articles about (brak przedimka) family of famous people.
The main disadvantage of being the child in 'the' (zly przedimek) famous family is invasion of privacy. Journalists 'like write' (nie rozumiem o co chodzi tutaj) articles about the children of famous people 'what' (kalka z polskiego 'co, ale po ang mamy inne slowa) is very irritating. For example, when you go to 'the' (zly przedimek) restaurant with parents, they will be asked to 'make' (zle slowo, tutaj DO) an interview with them by journalists. Moreover, 'the' (neipotr) famous parents can be the reason of some problem in school. The child can be lonely and 'it' (o dziecku piszesz 'it' to nie jest przedmiot, to zywa osoba, a zwracamy sie inaczej gdy mowimy o zywych) can have 'got' (niepotr) difficulties with accommodation in school 'society' (zle slowo, tutaj np. 'environment'). Scandals and rumors spread by mass media about its parents can be a reason 'of' (zle slowo, tutaj FOR) a lack of friends.
Having 'considerate' (zla czesc mowy, tutaj 'considered') both sides of (brak przedimka) arguments, being a child in a famous family has got a lot of advantages and disadvantages. I definitely share the view of the supporters of this opinion although it has 'god' ( o kim mowa?) (brak slowa, np. and') also bad sides.

Zrob cos z tymi przedimkami (a, an, the)

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