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Dear Sir/Madam
I am writing to point out that the condition of my school is an appalling state and suggest some solutions to the problem.

When I first come to this school the building has been well-maintained. The construction had a tight windows and was regularly heated. The classrooms were sterile, equipped with complacent chairs and benches. Everyone felt pleasurable.

Recently, however, the condition of this building is unacceptable. On the outside, the school looks appalling. Ancient and scuffed bricks create a repulsive sight. It does not look encouraging. The windows are leaking and we are fed up with sitting in cold classrooms. Also, on the walls are damp and mould. Many students are allergies so these conditions have affected on their health. The reason of that there has been no money invested in renovating the building for a long time.

It would be in everyone's interests to improve the standards in the school. Students spends in the school even eight hours a day so they need a good circumstances for learning. One solution might be to insulate the windows. We want to feel cosily in this place.

I feel very strongly about this issue and hope that we shall see some improvements soon.

Yours faithfully,
XYZ

really ? I don't quite get this line :(

jest w złym stanie, a nie jest złym stanem
has been - zly czas, mowisz o przeszlosci
feel pleasurable to zła kolokacja
jak masz recently, to użyj present perfect
wielu studentów są alergiami???
affect nie Å‚Ä…czy sie z 'on'
The reason of that is that there ...
students spends???
feel cosy
+ złe przedimki przed tight windows, good circumstances

Dear Sir/Madam
I am writing to point out that the condition = STAN of my school is an appalling state = STAN and suggest some solutions to the problem.

When I first come CZAS to this school the building has been CZAS well-maintained. The construction had a PRZED LICZBA MNOGA? tight windows and was regularly heated. The classrooms were sterile, equipped with complacent JAKICH? chairs and benches. Everyone felt pleasurable DZIWNE SLOWO W TYM KONTEKSCIE.

Recently, however, the condition of this building is CZAS unacceptable. On the outside, the school looks appalling. Ancient and scuffed bricks create a repulsive sight. It does not look encouraging. The windows are leaking and we are fed up with sitting in cold classrooms. Also, on the walls are damp and mouldY. Many students are JA NIE JESTEM ALERGIÄ„ allergies so these conditions have affected on their health. The reason of ZLY PRZYIMEK that A GDZIE TU ORZECZENIE there has been no money invested in renovating the building for a long time.

It would be in everyone's interests to improve the standards TO SIE KOJARZY Z POZIOMEM NAUCZANIA in the school. Students spends ZLA FORMA CZASOWNIKA in the school even eight hours a day so they need a ZNOWU good circumstances for learning. One solution might be to insulate the windows. We want to feel cosily TU MUSI BYC PRZYMIOTNIK, ALE LEPIEJ NIE 'COSY' in this place.

TYLKO JEDNO ROZWIAZANIE? ZA MALO

I feel very strongly about this issue and hope that we shall WILL see some improvements soon.

Yours faithfully,
XYZ