Pomoc w pisaniu paragrafu

Witajcie :)
Napisałam paragraf na angielski i potrzebuję kogoś mądrego, kto mi to sprawdzi i poprawi ewentualne błędy :)

Three curiosities of reading out loud.
Firstly, reading out loud smooths wrinkles. It has been proven that reading out loud relax your facial muscles, especially these around the eyes, the mouth and on the forhead.
Secondly, reading out loud combats shyness. The surveys by NEA (National Endowment for the Arts) reveals that people who read out loud are more confident and open-minded. Why? When we read out loud, we are teaching to control of voice and adapt it to certain heroes of the story. As time went on, it helps us to be more communicative and braver.
Thirdly, reading out loud loosens our body. When we read out loud, we put our body into gentle vibrations what loosens muscles and tendons. It gives us the massage from the inside. Reading out loud helps to reduce pain, for example in the neck and head.
To sum up, we should read out loud as many as possible because it delivers us a lot of interesting benefits. Go ahead and read.

Three curiosities of reading out loud.
Firstly, reading out loud SMOOTHES wrinkles. It has been proven that reading out loud relax< -ZŁA FORMA, PAMIETAJ O SUBJECT-VERB AGREEMENT your facial muscles, especially THOSE around the eyes, the mouth and on the forhead.
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Thirdly, reading out loud loosens our body. When we read out loud, we put our body into gentle vibrations what< -ZŁE SŁOWO loosensS-V AGREEMENT muscles and tendons. It gives us the massage from the inside. Reading out loud helps to reduce pain, for example, in the neck andPRZEDIMEK head.
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Three curiosities of reading out load.
Firstly, reading out loud smoothes wrinkles. It has been proven that reading out loud relaxing our facial muscles, especially those around the eyes, the mouth and in the forehead.
Secondly, reading out loud combats shyness. The surveys by NEA (National Endowment of the Arts) reveals that people who read out loud are more confident and open-minded. Why? When we read out loud we are teaching to control voice and adapt it to certain characters of the story. In the course of time, it helps us be more communicative and braver.
Thirdly, reading out loud loosens our body. When we read out loud, we put our body into gentle vibrations which loosens muscles and tendons. It gives us the massage from the inside. Reading out loud helps to reduce pain, for example, in the neck and the head.
To sum up, we should read out loud as much as possible because it provides us a lot of interesting benefits. So go ahead and read!

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