Proszę o pomoc w napisaniu tekstu piosenki

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Proszę o sprawdzenie, ponieważ mogłam coś źle jednak zrozumieć;)
Oto link do piosenki:

How on my own
That's slowly to the music
That's sure around me
Tonight I'm gone
How can I feel..... deep inside me

Step in the fair
Come close to me
Loving desire
Loves all I need
Doesn't / That's me babe
Move to the bit/ beat
We're go crazy
Thour of the hit

If you need somebody
You're another alone
I can't feel your body
Give me in the zone
We can here in the party
Doesn't / That's all I long
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song

You're never know
How ever happy dancer to the moonlight?
This hold me colse
How you wanna go feel so right?


Step in the fair
Come close to me
Loving desire
Loves all I need
Doesn't / That's me babe
Move to the bit/ beat
We're go crazy
Thour of the hit

If you need somebody
You're another alone
I can't feel your body
Give me in the zone
We can here in the party
Doesn't / That's all I long
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song

If you need somebody
You're another alone
This's like everybody
In your in the zone
We can here in the party
.......................
Baby you're my song

Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song
I'm on my own
dancing slowly to the music
that surrounds me
Tonight I am gone
I can feel the energy built up inside me

na tyle mam czas
Step in the fire
...
That's all it need
...
Turn up the heat
...
Get me in the zone
*LOVE'S all I need
edytowany przez Aaric: 31 paź 2017
Love's what I need
Dance with me babe :)
We can go crazy

nie, chyba jednak baby
edytowany przez labtes: 31 paź 2017
Ok, dziękuję za pomoc ;)
Dancing all night long
....
I don't wanna let this go because feels so right
Dzięki ;)
Zrobiłam poprawki do tekstu wspólnie stworzonego:

I’m on my own
dancing slowly to the music
that surrounds me
Tonight I am gone
I can feel the energy built up inside me

Step in the fire
Come close to me
Loving desire
Love's what I need
Dance with me baby
Move to the beat
We can go crazy
Turn up the heat

If you need somebody
You're another alone
I can't feel your body
Get me in the zone
We can here in the party
Dancing all night long
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song

You're never know
How ever happy dancer to the moonlight?
This hold me colse
I don't wanna let this go because feels so right

Step in the fire
Come close to me
Loving desire
Love's what I need
Dance with me baby
Move to the beat
We can go crazy
Turn up the heat

If you need somebody
You're another alone
I can't feel your body
Get me in the zone
We can here in the party
Dancing all night long
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song

If you need somebody
You're another alone
This's like everybody
In your get in the zone
We can here in the party
.......................

Baby you're my song

Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song
Baby you're my song

Pogrubione wersy to wersy, których jeszcze nie jestem pewna.
edytowany przez Kicia2202: 01 lis 2017
Slowa w ostatniej zwrotce nie mają sensu np powinno być 'You are not alone' dalej też źle. W całej piosence jest również możliwość błędów.
Witam,
to znowu ja ;) Proszę o pomoc w napisaniu kolejnej piosenki, tyle udało mi się napisać.
Jednak nie wiem czy z pisownią jest wszystko dobrze. Bardzo proszę o weryfikację.
Mam, jak na razie wszystko tylko do początku drugiej zwrotki.

If you got me on the street
On breath that the play on game
Say sweet nothing it's to me
but in the morning you feel the same

So you wake me up, wake me up
but very, very wake me up
I want you sick enough
but very, very wake me up
'cause you like my fire , like my fire
I you lucky same me higher

Gimme me waiting, gimme me waiting
For your lover passion me waiting
Gimme me crazy, gimme me crazy
Your only one nothing save me
You life me open I'm gone alone
Don't let me go, don't let me go

Let me, let me how you
to be and the time
Let me, let me hold you
tell it on your mind
I'm taxed can't it a this so life
but if you, I like a crime
but if you, I like a crime

You make me feel alive
Make everything alright
You say, you feel the same
??????????????? I am
edytowany przez Kicia2202: 04 lis 2017
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