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What are the advantages and disadvantages of being famous – 120-180 words organized in four paragraphs.
Introductin, adv., disadv. , and conclusion.

In today’s world a lot of people are looking for fame. They want to be famous actors, singers or celebrities. Others are interested in famous people and want to be like them, imitate their fashion and lifestyle. They buy gossip magazines and dream of being like them.

The main advantage of being famous is that it gives you wealth, and entails easy life amidst prime goods, such as expensive sports cars, large mansions with almost parks in it. All this wealth makes you an attractive male for beautiful women who seek their fortune, safety and easy life. Another advantage is that it makes you part of the cream of society, a celebrity and maybe a face on a front page in a famous journal. You are famous and celebrity assembly will conclude with dinners and meetings. Getting to know other famous ones, maybe famous plastic surgeons, eager to make you even more attractive.

However, there are some minor disadvantages too. Any gossips and scandals around you won’t blow over right away. Once you are vilified in the tabloids paparazzi won’t let it go. They will pray on you seeking news.

In conclusion, there are more benefits. People chase money and fame gives it to them.
edytowany przez calf: 04 mar 2019
Wedlug mnie, to mniej wiecej advantages i disadvantages powinny byc tej samej wielkosc.

W para 1 nie piszesz ze bedziesz dyskutowal advantages i disadvantages, tak, jakby to sie nie laczylo.

The main advantage of being famous is that it gives you wealth, and entails easy life amidst prime goods, such as expensive sports cars, large mansions with 'almost parks in it' (tego nie rozumiem). All this wealth makes you an attractive male for beautiful women who seek their fortune, safety and (brak przedimka) easy life. Another advantage is that it makes you part of the cream of society, a celebrity and maybe a face on 'a' (wg mnie tutaj 'the') front page in a famous journal. You are famous and 'celebrity assembly' (tego nie rozumiem) will conclude with dinners and meetings. Getting to know other famous 'ones' (nie, tutaj to jest zle slowo), maybe famous plastic surgeons, eager to make you even more attractive.

Ja bym dala tak po 3 advantages i 3 disadvantages.
1. The main advantage of being famous is that it gives you wealth, and entails easy life amidst prime goods, such as expensive sports cars, large mansions with 'almost parks in it' (tego nie rozumiem).

--> ...wielkie posiadłości z niemal parkami w środku.

2. You are famous and 'celebrity assembly' (tego nie rozumiem) will conclude with dinners and meetings.

--> celebrity assembly - zgromadzenie celebrytów

3. Getting to know other famous 'ones' (nie, tutaj to jest zle slowo), maybe famous plastic surgeons, eager to make you even more attractive.

--> dlaczego złe słowo? W tłumaczeniu to będzie: Poznawanie innych znanaych osób. Zamiast 'ones' mógłbym użyć 'people'.
edytowany przez calf: 05 mar 2019
celebrity assembly wyszukaj inne słowo np zaczynające się na g...
edytowany przez Aaric: 06 mar 2019
1...large mansions with 'almost parks in it' (tego nie rozumiem).
Ja to bym zrobila inaczej....mansions, which are surrounded by expansive greenery (albo cos podobnego) resembling large parks.
2. You are famous and 'celebrity assembly' (tego nie rozumiem) will conclude...
...assembly to uzywa sie inaczej, poszukaj w google, tutaj wystarczy cos na gxxxx...
3. Getting to know other famous 'ones' (nie, tutaj to jest zle slowo), maybe ...
'ones' nie uzywa sie w ten sposob. Mozesz uzyc 'people' albo nawet 'celebrities' albo 'stars'
Cytat:
assembly to uzywa sie inaczej
True, assembly also means putting parts together as one, right from seperated ones and being scattered for instance .
'celebrity gatherings' juz bardziej ..
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