bardzo prosze o spr.tekstu:'What are advantages..'

...poniewaz musze oddac w piatek w szkole ten esej:


What are advantages and disadvantages of living in a city?


Have you ever thought about the advantages and disadvantages of living in cities?
They such considerations can show us, that living in cities has not only good sides, but also many negative sides.
One point in favour of living in cities is, that in cities are many places in which you can meet with yours friends, e.g. cinemas, discos, museums, theatres, restaurants, etc. - where you can spend your free time and relax. In city are a lot of enterprises and
we can easily seek good work. What is more, you have enormous department store nearby your house and you can do the shopping very quickly
However, life in city it is not profitable for health. All manner of car fumes, wastes
or the pollutions of waters are outcrier diseases factors. What is more, growing crime reduces safety people. In so called cement blocks area more often comes to theft
and to beat men. In addition, living in a cities is very troublesome, noise is unbearable often. For example, try to imagine, that twenty lorries cross near your house and a lot of noise makes in moment when you want to assemble and to read book
All in all, where we will live in future, it depends only from us. And we have
to remember, that living in a city is easier than in the country, but very unhealthy and dangerous.

'They' (dlaczego zaczynasz zdanie z 'they'? z czym to sie laczy?) such considerations can show us, that living in cities has not
only 'good' (to znaczy - lepiej advantages) sides, but also many negative sides.
...that in cities THERE are many places 'in which' (WHERE) you can meet with 'yours' (dlaczego yours? slowo jest YOUR) friends...
In THE city THERE are a lot of 'enterprises' (chyba zle slowo - znajdz inne) and
we can easily seek 'good' (to znaczy jaki?)work.
What is more, you have enormous department store (tylko jedno? chyba wiecej? wtedy l. mnoga) 'nearby' (nie, albo nearby albo near your house) your house and you can...
However, life in 'A' city 'it' (dlaczego 'it'?) is not 'profitable' (zle slowo -beneficial) for health. All manner of car fumes, 'wastes' (chyba waste) or the pollutions of 'waters' (czy masz na mysli rivers?) are 'outcrier' (tego nawet nie rozumiem) 'diseases' (disease) factors. What is more, 'growing' (nie, increased)crime reduces THE safety OF people (albo people's safety). In so called 'cement blocks' (niewiem ktore to takie? chyba high rise flats) area 'more often comes to theft' (nie, to cos nie tak, 'theft is on the increase') and to 'beat men' (nie, men are being beaten up). In addition, living in 'a' (bez 'a') cities is very troublesome, THE noise is VERY OFTEN unbearable.For example, try to imagine, that twenty lorries cross near your house and a lot of noise 'makes' (IS MADE) in A moment when you want to 'assemble' (chyba RELAX, concentrate) and to read 'A' book.
All in all, where we 'will' (bez 'will) live in THE future, 'it' (bez 'it')depends ENTIRELY ON US.'only from' us. 'And' (nie zaczynaj zdan z 'and') we have to remember, that living in a city is 'easier' (w jakim sensie) than in the country, but IT IS very unhealthy and dangerous.

dziekuje za sprawdzenie i pomoc, duzo to pomoglo i poprawiłem tak, jeżeli mógłbyś teraz sprawdzić:

Have you ever thought about the advantages and disadvantages of living in cities? They such considerations can show us, that living in cities has not only good sides, but also many negative.
One advantages of living in cities is that there are many places where you can meet with yours friends, e.g. cinemas, discos, museums, theatres, restaurants, etc. - there you can also spend your free time and relax. In city are a lot of enterprises and we can easily find good work. What is more, you have enormous department store near your house and you can do the shopping very quickly
However, life in city is not good for health. All manner of car fumes, wastes or water pollution cause diseases. What is more, increasing crime reduces people's safety. E.g. in cement blocks area more often comes to theft or robbery and men are being beaten up. In addition, living in cities is very troublesome, the noise is very often unbearable. For example, try to imagine that twenty lorries are going near your house when you want to relax and read a book
All in all, where we live in the future, that's our choice. Therefore we have to remember, that living in a city is easier than in a country, but it is very unhealthy and dangerous.

po prostu myślę, ze zyc w miescie jest bardziej dla wygodnych - latwiejsze.

'They' (dalej nie rozumiem tego 'they' tutaj- to jest niepotrzeb) such considerations.. many negative (ale czego sides?).
...where you can meet with 'yours' (dlaczego tego nie poprawiles - czy moje slowa maja isc w wiatr - to ma byc YOUR) friends..
(DLACZEGO nie poprawiles, drugi raz tego samego nie bede pisala).

dziekuje bardzo,
poprawilemte dwie rzeczy, tylko teraz widze, ze skopiowalem wersje bezpoprawionego ;/ jezeli cala reszta jest dobrze,to bardzo dziekuje za pomoc - dzis to oddaje :)

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