wypracowanie2 - sprawdzenie

Witam ponownie. To moje drugie przemówienie. Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie. Jednocześnie zwracam się z prosbą do osób, którw sprawdzały moje pierwsze przemówienie, żeby tam jeszcze zajrzały, ponieważ mam jeszcze kilka pytań. Z góry dziękuję!

Temat: Is your country better or worse than it used to be?

In the last 20 years in Poland upgrade the level of dreams. When there was a communism the people approved of life without any prospects. There wasn’t a hunger but the people couldn’t dream about fat city. The films showed people who lived in their own house, who traveled with a beautiful car and who bought the newest technologies, but those pictures wasn’t realistic. Today each of the residents of Poland can see the people who have their own house and good car and in the few years they get a smaller or bigger fortunes, but there is a belief that the most of this fortunes arised in unfair way. It is difficult to tell apart which arised with the inventiveness and diligence of the people and which beginning were an uninventiveness or thieving.
For many people life in Poland has changed for better and worse. For better because in the shops there are everything what we want. For worse, because only a few people can buy a branded clothes and cars from the west. The most of people must buy a secondhand clothes and cars or imported from the country of the Third World.
The company's product range has changed, the prices have changed, the prospects have changed. In this fact many people have sense that their standard of living worsened. There occured an unemployment and insecurity of revenue. We have difficulties with lead of hauseholders budget. Today poland is a democratic country even if it is a wanting democracy. This country is full of abilities. It is a challenge which can give us a lot of satisfaction.

Poprawilam,
In the last 20 years in Poland (tutaj cos brakuje...there has been an) 'upgrade' (niewiem czy to dobre slowo) the level of dreams. 'When there
was a communism' (lepiej .Under communism.) 'the' (bez the) people 'approved' (nie, chyba nie approved a 'accepted') life without any prospects.
There wasn't 'a' (bez 'a') hunger (lepiej...People did not go hungry/were not hungry) but 'the' (bez the) people couldn't dream about 'fat city' (nie rozumiem co masz na mysli).
'The' (tak, ale ktore?) films showed people who lived in their own houseS, who travelLed IN a beautiful car and who bought the newest 'technologies' (nie, lepiej technological gadgets,equipment), but those pictures 'wasn't' (those-l. mnoga, wasn't-l.poj-lepiej pictures were not/did not reflect reality) realistic. Today 'each of the' (lepiej Every resident) residents of Poland can 'see' (mozna tez 'observe') 'the' people who have their own house and A good car and (tutaj brakuje... and that they have managed to achieve this) in A MATTER OF few years 'they get a smaller or 'bigger'(larger) fortunes' (mozna tz...they have managed to ammass smaller or larger fortunes). There is a belief
that 'the' (bez the) most of thESE fortunes arOSE in AN unfair (mozna tez illegal?) way. It is difficult to 'tell apart' (lepsze slowo separate those) which arOSE with the inventiveness and diligence of the people and which begAN as uninventiveness or thieving (mozna tez ...were the result of ...)
For many people life in Poland has changed. (tutaj Certain aspects for THE better and certain for worse). (lepiej zacznij The better aspects are that..) 'because' in the shops there 'are' (IS) everything THAT we want. For
worse, because only a few people can buy 'a' (bez 'a') branded clothes (mozna tez good quality) and cars from the West. 'The most of people' (zla kolejnosc slow...Most of the people) must buy (mozesz dodac...are reduced to buying) secondhand clothes and cars 'or' (czy masz na mysli which are) imported from the countrIES of the Third World.
'In this fact' (BY this) many people 'have sense' (lepiej 'sense') that their standard of living HAS worsened. There 'occured an' (moze lepiej ..has been an increase in) unemployment and insecurity of 'revenue' (nie, slowo to 'income') 'We' (tzn kto? lepiej napisac oni- They) have difficulties with 'lead of hOUsehold' (managing the household?) budget. Today Poland is a democratic country even if it is a wanting democracy. (lepiej The country) This country is full of 'abilities' (nie, possibilities).

Terri dziękuję ci za pomoc, zarówno za pierwsze jak i drugie wypracowanie. Dziękuję, że poświęciłaś mi czas. Jestem ci naprawdę wdzięczna. A jeśli jutro uda mi się zaliczyć to będę ci wdzięczna do końca życia:-) Dziękuję. pozdrawiam!

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