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As a result of the degradation of the environment particularly threatened places are equatorial forests. This forests are important for everyone because its supply the atmosphere with oxygen, and we use this gas in breathing process. So if there is no oxygen there is no live.

The most know equatorial forests are in Brazil on the Amazon river. In hot clime where rainfalls are very often, live a lot of beautiful, various animals and inimitable, unique plants but their space of their occurrence is getting smaller.

Brazil is a poor country and it wants to develop. So as a result governments do not look after environment, they only want to reach greater profits and financial incomes. They cut trees in order to have place to build new factories and employing establishment. They also have less restrictive regulations than other developed countries so that concerns want to invest there.

In this developing industry region due to degradation of environment suffer everyone. Air is polluted by car and factory fumes, water by sewage and soil by destructive wastes. Animals are deprived their natural habitat which is their home.

Few years ago this place was full of life and now it is only another industrial estate. Everything for human stupidity without limit. We should think about our grandchildren. Will they want to live in so polluted and sad earth?

As a result of the degradation of the environment particularly
threatened places are THE equatorial forests. 'This' (l.poj) forests (l.mn)are important for everyone because THEY supply the atmosphere with oxygen, and we (all) use this gas in OUR breathing process. So if there is no oxygen there is no 'live' (live to czasownik, a tutaj potrz rzecz. LIFE)

The most knowN equatorial forests are in Brazil 'on' (moze near, nearby) the 'Amazon river' (zla kol. river Amazon). In THE hot 'clime' (climate) where 'rainfalls are very often' (moze lepiej 'rain constantly falls') live a lot of beautiful, various animals and inimitable, unique plants but their 'space of their 'occurrence'' (cos tu nie tak, moze lepiej 'their habitats') ARE 'getting smaller' (moze 'being reduced').

So as a result governments do not look after THE environment, they only want to 'reach' (moze lepiej 'achieve') greater profits and financial incomes. They cut trees in order to have placeS to build new factories and (cos tutaj brakuje - albo 'as') employing establishmentS. They also have less restrictive regulations than other developed countries so (tutaj bym dodala, 'so as to encourage large concerns', albo 'so they encourage'..) to invest there.

In this developing industrIAL region (moze lepiej tutaj 'everyone suffers') due to degradation of THE environment 'suffer everyone'.
Animals are deprived OF their natural habitat which is their home.

Everything (moze lepiej 'without limit'tutaj) for (what can only be described as) human stupidity 'without limit'.