My ideal school.. Prośba:)

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The ideal school is what every studeents dream. In that school students should feel relaxed and go to it pleasure. So in the ideal school nice and understanding teachers teach.

Students ouhtn't to come to school sleepy. They have to be relaxed and in a good mood. Lessons start at 8.30 a.m. ind end at 2 p.m. Breaks are persist fifteen minutes and lesson thirty. Teachers are sociable, creative and patient. They always hepl students with their problems. Each pupil has a computer and he/she studies only he/she wants. In a class is about twenty students. Half of this students are girls and half boys. To this school studeents and teachers go in their favourite clothes. Usually boys in loose slacks and blouses, and girls in miniskirts and t-shirts with big decolts. The ideal school is safe but in they aren't installed the cameras becouse students must be free physical and psyhical.

Swimming pool, libary with computers, drink machines and smoking-room are only some facilities is school of my dream.
It is a pleasure going to that school. The lessons aren't borning, teachers are open-minded as their pupils. Every topic is clear becouse the teachers has explainded everything.
After school large part of students go home. Second part usually boys go to a school brawl between black and white students of this school. This brawl are of course top secret becouse illegal and any teacher or other people don't know about this clashs.

Isn't that the school of your dreams?

The (AN) ideal school is what every studeents dream (IS EVERY STUDENT'S DREAM albo IS WHAT EVERY STUDENT DREAMS ABOUT). In that school (THE) students should feel relaxed and go to it pleasure (GO THERE WITH PLEASURE). So in the ideal school nice and understanding teachers teach. (Lepiej: Also, the teachers who teach in the ideal school are nice and understanding)

Students ouhtn't (OUGHT NOT) to come to school sleepy. They have to be relaxed and in a good mood. Lessons start at 8.30 a.m. ind (AND) end at 2 p.m. Breaks are persist (THE BREAKS LAST - przerwy trwaja) fifteen minutes and (THE) lessonS (-) thirty MINUTES. (THE) teachers are sociable, creative and patient. They always hepl (HELP) students with their problems. Each pupil has a computer and he/she studies only (WHAT) he/she wants. In a class is about twenty students (THERE ARE ABOUT TWENTY STUDENTS IN A CLASS). Half of this (THESE) students are girls (.) and half boys (po co - and half boys?? Jest to raczej jasne ;-)) To this school studeents and teachers go in their favourite clothes (polski szyk zdania. Powinno byc: Students and teachers wear their favourite clothes in this school). Usually boys in (bez: in, lepiej: WEAR)loose slacks and blouses (lepiej: JUMPERS, blouse to bluzka damska, nie bluza), and girls in (WEAR, bez in) miniskirts and t-shirts with big decolts (LOW-CUT T-SHIRTS). The ideal school is safe but in they aren't installed the cameras (BUT THERE AREN'T ANY CAMERAS INSTALLED) becouse (BECAUSE) students must be free physical and psyhical (SHOULD HAVE THE FEELING OF PHYSICAL AND MENTAL COMFORT).

(A) swimming pool, (A) libary with computers, drinkS machines and (A) smoking room are only some facilities is (IN, nie is) (THE) school of my dreamS.
It is a pleasure going to that school. The lessons aren't borning, (THE) teachers are (AS) open-minded as their pupils. Every topic is clear becouse (BECAUSE) the teachers has (HAVE-liczba mnoga) explainded (EXPLAINED) everything.
After school (A) large part of (THE) students go home. (THE) second part (,)usually boys (,) go to a school brawl(FIGHT) between (the) black and white students of this school. This (THESE) brawl (FIGHTS) are of course top secret becouse (BECAUSE) THEY ARE illegal and (NEITHER THE) teacherS NOR other people (bez: don't) know about this clashs (ABOUT THEM).

Isn't that the school of your dreams?

cos mi to bardzo, ale bardzo przypomina ten tekst ktory ja juz dzisiaj poprawialam i wlasnie tez dla 'Gizmo666'. Wklejanie tego samego tekstu dwa razy na dzien, niestety odpedza ludzi od dalszej pomocy. Juz pisalam, ze nie wszyscy siedza tu 24/7, i ze ich czas tez jest cenny.

Przepraszam za problemy. Źle umieściłem ten temat więc skopiowałem go do działu Nauka. Prosze o kontynuację tematu na tamtym dziale i jeszcze raz przepraszam.

Tak, zauwazylam dopiero po fakcie. Coz, bedzie second opinion. ;-)) Pozdrawiam.