prosze o sprawdzenie bardzo prosze

Prosze o sprawdzenie eseju na ten temat: Stusents should be allowed to choose the subjects they want to study. Do you agree??
Ewentualnie można tu dodac pare zdań.

Students spend most part of their day at school. Undoubtedly, this time should be used properly. Therefore it is vital to decide what subjects students should be learning.
On the one hand, it is much easier to lern what you are interested in. Sometimes, compulsory school subjects are boring and unnessecery for each of them. Students do not work hard if they are not interested in the subjects. What is more, students learn more willing the subject they need. Also, the development of skills makes students disciplined.
On the other hand, some of them might only choose easy subjects and not work hard enough. This idea is proper just for hard-woarking students.
All in all, choosing subjects is very important. In my opinion, it is students tahat should decide. They must be allowed to create their future.

widze ze nikt mi nie chce pomóc. szkoda ale moze jednak ktos miły znajdzie minutke prosze!!!!!!!!!!!!!!błagam!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Students spend 'most' 'part' (albo most albo part-lepiej most) of their day at school.
Therefore 'it is' (tak, ale kto ma to decydowac?) vital to decide what subjects students should be learning.
...much easier to leArn what you are interested in.
...unnessecery-(sprawdz to slowo w slowniku)
What is more, students learn more willingLY (if they study) the subjectS THAT they ARE LIKELY TO need.
Also, the development of 'skills' (napisz np...) makes students disciplined.
On the other hand, some of 'them' (lepiej the students) might only choose THE easy subjects and not work hard enough. This idea is 'proper' (nie rozumiem co masz na mysli-czy correct?) just for THE hard-woRking students.
In my opinion, it (should be) students tHAT decide. They must be allowed to create their OWN future.

martusia,
generalnie tutaj nie wklejamy tego samego tekstu wiecej jak jeden raz - a jak chcesz sprawdzic, czy dobrze to zrobilam, to prosze to napisac tak:
"terri mnie to juz raz poprawila, ale chcialabym miec pewnosc czy ona to dobrze zrobila".