Czy ta historia jest napisana dobrze?

Witam,

Przed chwilą napisałem taką historyjkę>> Jeśli możecie to sprawdźcie to :) Historia miała być napisana w czasach przeszłych (S. Past, Past Perfect, Past Continues)

OTO ONA:

One day a man escaped from Caracas Prison. He had killed two girls on a party in a restaurant before he went to prison. The Police was trying to catch him for nearly a month. He escaped with three prisoners. After 3 days without eating man were very tired. They decided to rabber some money. They went to bank and they were taking cash from frightened bank stuff. Prisoners had a lot of money than. They bought some new clothes and food. But they forgot that the Police still trying to catch them! When they were in Chicago a men recognized them when they were walking near the bus station. A while later the Police catched them. Priosners had to returned to Prison again. They got life inprisonment.

Co o tym sądzicie? Czy czasy i zdania są dobrze dobrane? Co by tu poprawić. Tą historyjkę pisałem z 10 minut także nie bądźcie zbyt srodzy :)

Pozdro

He had killed two girls 'on' AT a party in a restaurant before he went to prison. The Police 'was' WERE trying to catch him for nearly a month.
After 3 days without 'eating' FOOD THE mEn were very tired. They
decided to 'rabber' ROB some money. They went to bank and 'they were taking' TOOK cash from frightened bank 'stuff' STAFF. Prisoners had a lot of money thEn.
But they forgot that the Police WERE still trying to catch them! When they were in Chicago a mAn recognized them when they were walking near the bus station. A while later the Police 'catched' CAUGHT them. 'Priosners' Prisoners had to retuRN to prison again. They got life.

Dzięki , ale oceń to czy to jest w miarę dobre na 3 gimnazjum (poziom raczej średni) i napisałem to w 10minut

Dzięki za poprawienie błędów.