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Dear Sir,

I am writing to ask for the assistance for my school. In this year we want to organize the drama festival for the first time. In the festival will take part pupils from different classes, teachers and guests specially invited: actors and artists which finished my school.
During the festival will be staged scenes from fairy tales, from films, from book and performances of invited guests. Well-known directors and scriptwriters will be watching over the course of the festival. For pupils it will be the excellent way to present its drama talents.
They will be able to themselves create the performance. Specially for this occasion, on the land schools, the true drama stage will be built.
The part of the profit on the festival will stay to needs of the school. The school needs assistance because the school lacks money for construction of the theatre and costumes.
Without supporting your company the festival will be cancelled. We would be delighted if you were the guest of honour on the festival. I am asking for positive examining my matter.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully

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I am writing to ask for 'the' (bez the) assistance for my school. In this year we want to organize 'the' A drama festival for the VERY first time.
In the festival 'will take part pupils from different classes' (zla kol slow ...pupils from diff. classes....), AS WELL AS teachers and 'guests specially invited' (zla kol slow- specially inv. guests): actors and artists 'which finished my school' (takich ludzi nazywami alumni).
...from films, from 'book' (tylko tego jednego - czy wiecej?) and performances of invited guests.
For pupils it will be the excellent way to present 'its' (nie - bo to odnosi sie do pupils-l.mn-THEIR) drama talents.
They will be able to 'themselves create the performance' (b. dziwnie - create the per. themselves). Specially for this occasion, A REAL drama stage will be built on the 'land schools' (nie - school land).
'The' (niepotrz) Part of the profit 'on' FROM the festival will 'stay' GO TOWARDS to needs of the school.
'Without supporting your company' (przetlumaczyles z polskiego - ale wyszlo calkowicie cos odmiennego, tak jakbym ty popieral ich firme a nie odwrotnie - tutaj ...Without the support of your company)the festival...We would be delighted if you were 'the' A guest of honour 'on' OF the festival.
I am asking for positive examinATION OF THIS matter.

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