Proszę Bardzo o sprawdzenie opowiadania ;P;P

It was a frosty day before Christmas eve. It has been snowing for a long time so everthing was coated with snow. Misterious patterns had been painted on panes and you could almost smell frequance os Christmas jollity. Jane's parents had planned that day for a long day. Today they were taking their doughetr home, as she could spent her last Christmas at home with family.
Jane woke up early in the morning. She was unimaginable happy she was going home. Staring blankly through the window she tried to recall viev of her house. She could hardly remember how it looked like. Suddenly she heard a bell, quickly looked around she noticed nobody to be seen. She heared it again and then... out of the blue a middle aged woman sat at the edge of her bed. She was wearing bright suit, her hair were fair and seemed to be silver, her almond eyes were full of warmth. She must be an angel thought Jenny. - Yes I am - said woman- I came here to take you somewhere, it's a beautifull place but before we set off you shoul go home with your parents said gaily woman.- Am I daying? asked horryfied Jenny- I've been here so long.. Your parents are here, see you at home Jenny said calmly angel and unexpectedly dissapeared. Just then Jenny's parens came. They were really marry, Hurriedly have packed her stuff and set off home.
Finally, when they have arrived the felt solace. Entering home Jenny was almost blown into peaces by growing happyness inside her. After have eaten supper they sat all together in livingroom nearby the christmas tree. But it wasn't ordinary thought Jenny. It was trimmed with colorfull ornaments and litle glimmers, but the most incralible was gold starnet on top. Jenny's little sister sang carols. Of course she was completly out of tune but nobody took care about it. Olny thing that mattered that time was that they were all together , happy.
Talking, laughting they lost feeling of time. when they felt tired and weary they went sleep. Jenny lied down. After a while her parents and little sister entered the room and one after another kissed cuddled her at good night.
Jenny felt deeply touched. She did't wanted to fall asleep. She waited anxiously for an angel. She knew she woul came and finally she came.-Time has came said angel an Jenny felt unimaginable calm... Next day Her parents found her dead. They called an ambulance but middleaged doctor with fair almost silver hair who came said : There was nothing to be done to avoid her death.- I'm sure that previous day was the best day she had ever had.


Proszę o sprawdzenie i o wskazówki co do słowsnictwa i może jakichś ciekawszych kolokacji. Z góry bardzo dzięuję ;p

Misterious patterns had been painted (mozna dodac by Jack Frost) on panes (of glass) and you could almost smell THE 'frequance' (ortog) oF Christmas jollity.
Today they were taking their 'doughetr' (ortogr) home, SO as she could spent her
last Christmas at home with THE family.
She was 'unimaginable' (ortog) happy AS she was going home. Staring blankly through the window she tried to recall THE vieWS of her house.
Suddenly she heard a bell, AND quickly lookING round 'she noticed nobody' (nie tak, lepiej ...she didn't see a thing, nobody, as there was nobody to be seen) to be seen. She 'heared' HEARD (czas niereg) it again and then...
She was wearing A bright (tutaj mozesz dodac kolor - np white)suit, her hair 'were' WAS fair and UT seemed to be silver..
Yes I am - said THE woman- I came here to take you somewhere, TO A beautifull place, but before we set off you shoulD go home with your parents... said THE gaily woman.- Am I 'daying' DYING? asked THE 'horryfied' (ortog) Jenny- I've been here so long.. Your parents are here, see you at home Jenny said calmly AND THE angel HAD unexpectedly issapeared.
.. Jenny's parenTs came IN. They were really 'marry' (nie, to jest zle - marry-to wyjsc za maz, ozenic sie - tutaj myslalas o 'merry' ale to nie za bardzo pasuje - lepiej HAPPY)
Hurriedly THEY 'have' (niepotr) packed her stuff and set off home.
Finally, when they 'have' (niepotr) arrived the felt solace. Entering home Jenny
was almost blown into peaces by A growing happIness inside her. After
THEY haD eaten supper they 'sat all' ALL SAT together in THE living room nearby the Christmas tree. But it wasn't AN ordinary TREE - thought Jenny. It was trimmed with coloUrfull ornaments and litle glimmers, but the most 'incralible' (ortog) was A gold starnet on top.
Of course she was completEly out of tune, but nobody took 'care about it' (nie, any notice). THERE WAS ONLY ONE thing that mattered that time AND THAT was that they were all together, happy.
Talking, 'laughting' (ortog) they lost ANY feeling of time. when they felt tired and weary they went TO sleep. Jenny 'lied' LAY down. After a while her parents and little sister entered the room and one after another kissed AND cuddled her 'at' (niepotr) good night.
She knew she woulD cOme and finally she came.-Time has cOme said aTHE ngel anD Jenny felt unimaginablY calm...
I'm sure that THE previous day was the best day she had ever had.

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