s.p.r.a.w.d.z.e.n.i.e pracy

Witam, czy mogłabym prosic o sprawdzenie mojej pracy ? I ewentualnie dopisanie czegoś?? Bardzo bede wdzięczna!

TEMAT: How can we reduce air pollution levels in our planet?

Nowadays air pollution levels is a serious issue which is touching everyone living in a city. Dangerous guantily of harmful gases is caused by cars, factories and us.
Firstly, factories emitted too much pollution. I think it would help if we create park. Then there would be less smoke and over the city.
Secondly, there is too much traffic in the city centre. Traffic jams are very long, so I think suggest to introduce park and ride scheme. The effect of this would be fewer cars.
The next problem is very important. There is too much rubbish which are burned. I think we should introduce a recycling sheme. The consequence of this would be less rubbish being burned.
Finally, we cam try to clean up our surrounding. The less pollution we produce, the more change for animals to survive. We can also keep an eye on what is happening around us. Animals are a part of our planet, so we should especially protect them.
In conclusion, there are many solutions of air pollution. If we want to breathe in clean air, we should do everything we can to protect our Earth. We are responsible not only for us, but also for animals and plants. We should care about our planet before will be too late. As Malcolm Bradbury said “If you are not part of the solutions, you are part of problem".


dziękuje :)

Nowadays air pollution levels 'is' (ale 'levels' to l. mnoga, a 'is' odnosi sie generalnie do l. poj) a serious issue which is touching everyone living in a city. Dangerous 'guantily' (quantity) of harmful gases is caused by cars, factories and 'us' (mnie i ciebie? czy lepiej people?).
Firstly, factories 'emitted' EMIT too much pollution. I think it would help
if we create A park. Then there would be less smoke 'and' (niepotr) over the city.
Traffic jams are very long, so I 'think' (niepotr) suggest 'to' THE introducTION OD A park and ride scheme.
There is too much rubbish which 'are' IS burned. I think THAT we should introduce a recycling sheme.
Finally, we 'cam' (can) try to clean up our surroundingS. The less pollution we
produce, the more 'change' CHANCE THERE IS for THE animals to survive.
...Animals are a part of our planet, so we should especially protect them....(mysle, ze dobrze, ale cos to zdanie mi nie gra)
We are responsible not only for us, but also for THE animals and
plants. We should care about our planet before IT 'will' IS 'be' (niepotr) too late.
...As Malcolm Bradbury said “If you are not part of the solutions, you
are part of problem"....(Moze lepiej...In the words of MB, 'If you are....)
>
>