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„Adolescence is the unhappiest time in most people’s lives.”


Adolescence is the time between twelfth and sixteenth years old. The girls grow up faster than the boys. Behaviour and emotions adolescent girls and boys are different. Is the time agreeable? Is it the worst time in life? It is very controversial issue and people’s opinoins are different.

There are several advantages to adolescence. Firstly, when somebody has got about fourteen or fiveteen years old look on world by pink spectacles. In example: everyone dreams about big, romancic love and professional career. Everyone thinks, that he is navel of world and all world will belong to him in the future. Secondly, adolescence is very carefree time. Adolescent doesn’t have to work and earn a living of family.

However, there are many arguments, that adolescence is the worst time in people’s lives. First of all, everyone who has got fourteen or fiveteen years old feel first love. But usually it is unhappy love. Young girls often fall in love in older boys who are adult. For adolescent it is big problem and disappointment. However, the boys drink alcohol and smoke, because they want feel like adults. Unfortunately, many teenagers reach for drugs, bacause they search manner on solve of problems in school and they want impress older friends. Next, adolescents often have got acne and they must use suitable cosmetics. Finally, teenagers usually argue with parents about everything. They want be independent and they react against parents.

In conclusion, adolescence has got good and bad aspects and we don’t unequivocal define which aspects are more. In my opinion, everyone survices this time different. Something for one person is the best time in life, but for other person it’s terrible. However, generally we thing, that adolescence isn’t good time in people’s lives.



A to jest wersja polska tego tekstu:

„Dorastanie to najgorszy okres w życiu człowieka.”

Dorastanie to okres między około 12 a 16 rokiem życia. Jednak dziewczynki dorastają szybciej niż chłopcy. Zachowanie i emocje dorastających dziewczynek są zupełnie różne niż chłopców. Czy jest okres miły i przyjemny? A może jest to najgorszy czas w życiu? To bardzo kontrowersyjna sprawa i zdania ludzi są podzielone.

Oto kilka zalet okresu dojrzewania. Po pierwsze, kiedy ktoś ma kilkanaście lat, patrzy na świat przez różowe okulary. Na przykład: każdy marzy o wielkiej romantycznej miłości, karierze zawodowej. Każdy myśli, że jest pępkiem świata i w przyszłości świat będzie należał do niego. Po drugie dorastanie to bardzo beztroski czas. Nastolatek nie musi pracować i zarabiać na życie rodziny.

Jednakże, jest wiele argumentów, że dorastanie to najgorszy okres wżyciu człowieka. Na początku, każdy, kto ma 14 lub 15 lat przeżywa pierwszą miłość. Ale zazwyczaj jest to miłość nieszczęśliwa. Często młode dziewczyny zakochują się w dużo starszych chłopakach, którzy często są już dorośli. Dla nastolatek jest to wielki problem i rozczarowanie. Chłopcy natomiast piją alkohol i palą papierosy, ponieważ chcą czuć się jak dorośli. Niestety wiele nastolatków sięga po narkotyki, bo szukają sposobu na rozwiązanie problemów w szkole i chcą zaimponować starszym kolegom. Następnie nastolatki często mają trądzik i muszą stosować odpowiednie kosmetyki. Wreszcie nastolatki zazwyczaj kłócą się z rodzicami o wszystko. Chcą być niezależni i buntują się przeciwko rodzicom.

Wnioskując, dorastanie ma zarówno złe i dobre strony i nie możemy jednoznacznie określić, których jest więcej. Według mnie każdy inaczej przeżywa ten okres i to co dla jednego jest najpiękniejszym czasem w życiu, dla innego może być koszmarem. Jednakże ogólnie uważamy, że dorastanie nie jest zbyt dobrym okresem w życiu ludzi
sprawdzilam, alewidac, ze musisz wpisac brakujace slowa.

Adolescence is the time between 'twelfth and sixteenth years old' (nie, to trzeba inaczej).
THE behaviour and emotions (tu cos brakuje) adolescent girls and boys are different.
Is the time agreeable? ' (ale is the time agreeable for what - nie piszesz)
Is it the worst time in (ale czyim? moim?) life? It is A very controversial issue and people's 'opinoins' (ortog) are different.

Firstly, when somebody 'has got about fourteen or fiveteen years old' (dlaczego takie bzdury piszesz, wiedzac jak formulowac zdania- to mi daje znac, ze twoj poziom jest elementary!!!) (tutaj potrzeba THEIR look on (tu cos brakuje) world IS 'by' (nie 'by' ale THROUGH 'pink' (nie mowimy 'pink' ale 'rose-coloured' spectacles.
'In' Czy to ma byc FOR? example: everyone dreams about (tu cos brakuje)big, 'romancic' (ortog) love and A professional career. Everyone thinks, that he is THE navel of (tu cos brakuje) world and all (tu cos brakuje) world will belong to him in the future. Secondly, adolescence is (tu cos brakuje) very carefree time. (tu cos brakuje) adolescent doesn't have to work and earn a living 'of' (zle - tutaj FOR (dla) (tu cos brakuje) family.

First of all, everyone 'who has got fourteen or fiveteen years old' (nie pisz wiecej tych bzdur- prosze nauczyc sie jak sie pisze o wieku) feelS first love. But 'usually' (a evidence na to? - czy to zawsze prawda?) it is unhappy love.
Young girls often fall in love 'in' WITH older boys who are (tu cos brakuje) adult. For (tu cos brakuje) adolescent it is (tu cos brakuje) big problem and disappointment. However, the boys drink alcohol and smoke, because they want (tu cos brakuje) feel like adults.
Unfortunately, many teenagers reach for drugs, 'bacause' (ortog) they ARE searchING (tu cos brakuje) manner 'on' OF solvING 'of' (niepotr) problems in school and they want (tu cos brakuje) impress (tu cos brakuje) older friends. Next, adolescents often have 'got' (niepotr) acne and they must use
suitable 'cosmetics' (cosmetics to nie najlepsze slowo - tutaj moze medication).
They want (tu cos brakuje) be independent and they react against
parents.
In conclusion, adolescence has got good and bad aspects and we 'don't' (zle slowo , tutaj CANNOT) 'unequivocal' (zla czesc zdania) define which aspects are more.(ale more co?) In my opinion, everyone 'survices' (co to za slowo?) this time (tu cos brakuje) different (tu cos brakuje). Something THAT for one person is the best time in (tu cos brakuje) life, but for ANother person it's terrible. However, generally we 'thing' (ortog), that adolescence isn't (tu cos brakuje) good time in people's lives.
terri dzieki za sprawdzenie ale mam jeszcze jedna prosbe....Dlaczego tak czesto napisalas mi ze tam cos brakuje?? W takim razie co brakuje?? Niewiem jak to inaczej napisac zeby bylo zgodne z tym co napisalam po polsku. Bardzo Cie prosze...moglabys mi napisac w takim uladzie po angielsku co tam brakuje zeby byl zachowany ogolny sens? Nie jestem zbyt dobra z angielskiego a bardzo zalezy mi na tym by dostac z tego 5;) prosze o pomoc...
generalnie brakuje 'a', 'an' i 'the' - jak poprawisz, to sprawdze jeszcze raz. A co do pisanie jak sie mowi ile ktos ma lat - to zobacz to w podrecznikach i popraw - nie mowi sie 'I have x years old' - czy tak nauczyciele Cie uczyli?
Ok w takim razie poprawię to i wdety mi jeszzce raz sprawdzisz,dobrze?;)
„Adolescence is the unhappiest time in most people’s lives.”


Adolescence is the time between twelfth and sixteenth years old. The girls grow up faster than the boys. The behaviour and emotions adolescent girls and boys are different. Is the time agreeable? Is it the worst time in life? It is a very controversial issue and people’s opinions are different.

There are several advantages to adolescence. Firstly, when somebody is about fourteen or fiveteen years old their look on the world through rose-coloured spectacles. For example: everyone dreams about a big, romanctic love and a professional career. Everyone thinks, that he is the navel of the world and all the world will belong to him in the future. Secondly, adolescence is a very carefree time. An adolescent doesn’t have to work and earn a living for a family.

However, there are many arguments, that adolescence is the worst time in people’s lives. First of all, everyone who is fourteen or fiveteen years old feels first love. But usually it is unhappy love. Young girls often fall in love with older boys who are an adult. For an adolescent it is a big problem and disappointment. However, the boys drink alcohol and smoke, because they want to feel like adults. Unfortunately, many teenagers reach for drugs, because they are searching a manner on solving problems in school and they want to impress a older friends. Next, adolescents often have acne and they must use suitable medication. Finally, teenagers usually argue with parents about everything. They want to be independent and they react against parents.

In conclusion, adolescence has got good and bad aspects and we cannot unequivocally define which aspects (jest więcej- jak to napisac??). In my opinion, everyone (przeżywa ten czas inaczej niż kto inny-jak to napisac?). Something that for one person is the best time in the life, but for another person it’s terrible. However, generally we think, that adolescence isn’t a good time in people’s lives.


To jest moj teks po poprawkach? I jak., sa jeszcze blędy?
TAK - bo calkowicie nie zrozumialas moich poprawek.

'Adolescence is the time between twelfth and sixteenth years old.,....To zdanie nie jest gram i jest bledne. Sprawdz to w podrecznikach. Ja za ciebie nie bede pisala.

The behaviour and emotions (DLACZEGO tutaj nie wstawilas cos, co juz mowilam ze brakuje...OF) adolescent girls and boys are different.
...Is the time agreeable? ...Calkowicie nie rozumiesz co to zdanie znaczy...Is the time agreeable to whom? Nie ma odpowiedzi.

Is it the worst time in (ale czyje - dlaczego nie napisalas, czy to moje, czy twoje zycie) life?
There are several advantages to 'adolescence' (nie, to jest bez sensu - . Firstly, when somebody is about fourteen or 'fiveteen' (ortog) years old 'their' (dlaczego piszesz 'ich' a nie 'oni' THEY) look on the world through
rose-coloured spectacles. For example: everyone dreams about a big,
'romanctic' (ortog) love and a professional career.

First of all, everyone who is fourteen or 'fiveteen' (blad ortog - tego sie uczylas bardzo dawno temu) years old 'feels' (lepsze slowo 'experiences') first love. But usually it is AN unhappy love.
Young girls often fall in love with older boys who are 'an' (niepotr) 'adult' (tu musi byc l. mnoga, dlatego, ze uzywasz 'boys').
Unfortunately, many teenagers reach for drugs, because they are
searching (FOR - dlaczego nie umiesz tworzyc dobrych zdan po ang.?) a manner 'on' OF solving problems in school and they want to
impress 'a' (niepotr) older friends.

In conclusion, adolescence has got good and bad aspects and we cannot
unequivocally define which aspects (jest więcej- jak to napisac??- tu trzeba cale zdanie zmienic).

In my opinion, everyone (przeżywa ten czas inaczej niż kto inny-jak to
napisac?-sama napisz). Something that for one person is the best time in theIR life, 'but' IS for another person 'it's' (niepotr) terrible.
„Adolescence is the unhappiest time in most people’s lives.”


The person who is twelfth years old begin adolescence. This time continue about four years. The girls grow up faster than the boys. The behaviour and emotions of adolescent girls and boys are different. Is the time agreeable? Is it the worst time in our life? It is a very controversial issue and people’s opinions are different.

There are several advantages of adolescence. Firstly, when somebody is about fourteen or fifteen years old they look on the world through rose-coloured spectacles. For example: everyone dreams about a big, romantic love and a professional career. Everyone thinks, that he is the navel of the world and all the world will belong to him in the future. Secondly, adolescence is a very carefree time. An adolescent doesn’t have to work and earn a living for a family.

However, there are many arguments, that adolescence is the worst time in people’s lives. First of all, everyone who is fourteen or fifteen years old experiences first love. But usually it is unhappy love. Young girls often fall in love with older boys who are adults. For an adolescent it is a big problem and disappointment. However, the boys drink alcohol and smoke, because they want to feel like adults. Unfortunately, many teenagers reach for drugs, because they are searching a manner of solving problems in school and they want to impress older friends. Next, adolescents often have acne and they must use suitable medication. Finally, teenagers usually argue with parents about everything. They want to be independent and they react against parents.

In conclusion, adolescence has got good and bad aspects and we cannot unequivocally define which aspects are more visible. In my opinion, something that for one person is the best time in their life, is for another person terrible. However, generally we think, that adolescence isn’t a good time in people’s lives.

I jeszcze jedno....chodzi mi o zdanie: Is the time agreeable? Jak mam to inaczej sformułować...chce zadać pytanie retoryczne..Czy jest to czas przyjemny? Więc co jest w tym zdanui nie tak??
Prosze sprawdz czy teraz juz jest wszystko w porządku i czy ta praca nadaje się na 5? ;)
Poprawie jeszcze raz.

The person who 'is twelfth years' (calkowicie zle - nie rozumiesz jak sie tworzy zdania - napisze...A person who IS 12 YEARS OLD begins adolescence.) This time continueS FOR about four years. (Moze lepiej tak jak mialalas...tylko teraz tego nie widze, ale wroce do tego).

Is the time agreeable?...Is the adolescence a time which is (pleasant or enjoyable-wybierz jedno z nich) OR is it the worst time in 'our' (lepiej THEIR liVES?

There are several advantages of 'adolescence' (nie, albo ..'OF being an adolescent' albo 'of the adolescence period').
Firstly, when somebody is about fourteen or fifteen years old they look 'on' AT the world through rose-coloured spectacles.
But usually it is AN unhappy love.
However, generally 'we' (napisz I-bo to twoje zdanie) think, that adolescence isn't a good time in people's lives.
>>>Adolescence is the time between 'twelfth and sixteenth years old' (to jest zle...napisz 'between 12 and 16 years of age').
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