krotkie opowiadanie po angielsku

Hej! Prosze o pomoc, a dokladniej o sprawdzenie mi tego opowiadania.. Nie jestem dobra z angielskiego, a szczegolnie w czasach..:( wiec jakby ktos mogl mi pomoc, to bede bardzo wdzieczna:)

A Lucky escape!

It was a sunny day. I and my friend go out for a car excursion. So, we guickly packed and jumped into the my car.

When we parked the car, we have gone for a walk among beautiful landscape. Suddenly, there was a huge raindrops began to fall. "Let's go back to the car" I said.

When we got into the car, I tried move off, but I have done it too fast. Then we got stuck in huge mud. Suddenly, we was a loud horrible storm. We got scared. It hails began to fall. The awful mud was growing. But luckily car move off.

My friend told me: "I'm very wet" and me said "I'm freezing". But we reach safely at home. I felt huge relieved.

No i tyle.. wiem, ze nie jest to wapaniałe opowiadanie.. wiec prosze o pomoc i poprawe:)

Mysle, ze powinno byc:

I and my friend went for a drive.
into my car (bez the)
we went for a walk
a beautiful landscape
suddenly, huge raindrops began to fall
I tried to move off, but I did it too fast.
Suddenly, a loud, horrible storm came.
It started to hail.
car moved off
and I said (nie "me")
reached home safely.
I felt huge relief.

the car moved off

Dziekuje bardzo bardzo:))***

Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie tego opowiadania i poprawienie masy błędów zrobionych przez mnie oto on: (z góry dziękuje)

Every night Alice, Amanda and Kate gathered at the square and watched the brightening sky. Girls followed on the Donkey square to watching the falling stars.
When they lying on the ground and looking on the sky they heared a chorrible cream. Girls decided to check what was happened. Alice for a self-defence took with herself a peper gas and a mobilephone to called for a police If they need.When they arrived to place from where stemed that screams they saw two womens, probably homeless. One of them holding on her hands a small baby and the second lying on pool of blood. Alice realized that women whos lying just born a baby and the second helpped her.
` I can`t believe!` sayed Kate.
` Maby we can help you?` asked Alice
Can you hold tis baby for a moment? And can you turned around?`say women
Alice took the baby and turned around and all girls jollied up a baby. They were such busied and they forgot about holly world, but when the baby was started crying girls woke up.
`Miss, your baby is crying!` told Alice and wait too much time for the answer.
When Alice turned around they were disappear.

....Girls followed on the Donkey square to watching the falling stars....(tego zdania nie rozumiem)
When they WERE lying on the ground and looking 'on' UP AT the sky they 'heared' (to slowo nie istnieje, to jest czas niereg. HEARD a 'chorrible' (ortog) 'cream' (ortog). THE girls decided to check what 'was' HAD happened. Alice 'for a self-defence' (daj to gdzies indziej w zdaniu) took with 'herself' HER a 'peper' (ortog) gas and a mobile phone (for self-defence) to 'called' CALL
for 'a' THE police if they WERE needED. When they arrived AT 'to' THE place 'from where' WHERE 'stemed that screams' (zrob to inaczej...where the screams had stemmed from) they saw two 'womens' WOMEN, probably homeless. One of them WAS holding 'on' IN her hands a small baby and the second WAS lying 'on' IN A pool of blood. Alice realized that THE 'women' (women to l. mnoga, a tutaj mowisz o l. poj WOMAN) 'whos' WHO WAS lying HAD just 'born' GIVEN BIRTH TO a baby and the second WOMAN HAD 'helpped' (ortog) her.
` I can`t believe IT!` 'sayed' (ej? SAID - ile razy czytasz to w ksiazkach?) Kate.
` 'Maby' (ortog) we can help you?` asked Alice
Can you hold 'tis' (ortog) baby for a moment? And can you 'turned' TURN around?`'say' SAID THE women
Alice took the baby and turned around and all THE girls 'jollied up' (nie rozumiem tego pojecia) a baby.
They were 'such' SO 'busied' BUSY THAT 'and' (niepotr) they forgot about THE 'holly' (zle slowo- popraw) world, but when the baby 'was' HAD started crying THE girls woke up.
`Miss, your baby is crying!` 'told' SAID Alice and waitED too 'much' LONG A time for the answer.
>When Alice turned around they 'were' HAD disappearED.