Proszę o sparwdzenie rozprawki

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Znów bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie mojej pracy, będę bardzo wdzięczna;)

Praca-błogosławieństwo czy przekleństwo?

In this day and age having a job is a highly valid. There are a lot of unemployeds, whose dream about any work. For some a working area may be a blessing, for another it is a curse. What is the truth?
Many people suggest, that appropiate work is a blessing, because it allows live on a heights and ensure profits. A labour enable a survival many families in this hard times. Furthermore, work is a benediction, especially if it could be satysfying and causes our develop. It is believed that a lot of companies create opportunieties in advanced training specially for young employees. Moreover, if in work is enjoyable atmosphere and associate are kind and heplful job truely may be a blessing. For many people a career become more significant than a family. However is not it a curse then?
On the other hand, a labour could be a curse, if it is a duty and people are not pleased for their proffesion. In particular, when in some corporation there is a rat race, and the atmosphere is insufferable or workmates are greedy and jealous of appointments. Additionally in some work area takes place a violence or an exploitation. Then job become a imprecation for employers, what is very worrying sitauation.
Even thought work is frequently hard and tiring, it is necessary. In my opinion, our job may be a blessing if we can take from it any benefits.
Masz może wersję polską? Bo nie bardzo wiadomo o co w niektórych zdaniach chodzi.
Wersja polska:
W dzisiejszych czasach posiadanie pracy jest bardzo ważne. Jest wielu bezrobotnych, którzy marzą o jakiejkolwiek pracy. Dla niektórych miejsce pracy moze byc błogosławienstwem dla innych jest to przeklenstwo. Jaka jest prawda?
Wielu ludzi uważa ze odpowiednia praca jest błogosławienstwem, bo pozwala zyc na wysokim poziomie i zapewnia zyski. Praca umożliwia wielu rodzinom przetrwanie w dzisiejszych czasach. Ponadto, praca to blogosławienstwo, szczególnie gdy moze byc satysfakcjonujaca i powodowac nasz rozwój. Uwaza sie ze wiele firm tworzy możliwości szkolenia szczególnie dla młodych pracowników. Poza tym, gdy w pracy jest miła atmosfera a wspolpracwonicy sa uprzejmi i pomocni praca naprawde moze byc błogosławienstwem.W dodatku, dla wielu ludzi kariera jest bardziej znaczaca niz rodzina. Jednak, czy nie jest to wtedy przeklenswto?
Z drugiej strony, praca moze byc przeklenswtem, jesli jest powinnoscia a ludzie nie sa zadowoleni ze swojego zawodu. W szczególnosci kiedy w firmach jest "wyscig szczurów" a atmosfera jest nie do zniesienia lub ludzie sa chciwi i zazdrosni o stanowiska. Dodatkowo w niektórych miejscach pracy maja miejsce: przemoc i wyzysk. Wtedy praca jest przeklenstwem dla pracowników, co jest martwiącą sytuacją.
Nawet jesli praca jest czesto trudna i meczaca, jest potzrebna i moim zdaniem moze byc błogosławienstwem jeśli umiemy wyciagnac z niej korzyści.
Przy okazji mogłabym prosic o zerkniecie na ta rozprawke? Powinna byc bardziej zrozumiała.

Czy szczuplejszy oznacza lepszy, a wyglad ma az takie duze znaczenie?

There has been a lot of discussion about a suitable appearance and everybody attach weight to own presentation. in my opnion, it has not so big importance, there are more significant features in other people
I am fully convinced that no matter if somebody is slim or fat, can be interesting person, who have many advantages. I do not agree that slimer or prettier is better. People should not assess other, nobody is not ideal, everybody have some drawbacks.
Someone is obese, but smart and what is then? He could not be rejected by a society. I believe that our populace is more and more eccepting and everybody have the same chances.
To my mind, anyone will not being always beautiful, thanks to they pay attention on personality traits. Frequently, people whose are are pretty and clean limbed are confident and selfish.
On the other hand, it seems that good appearance help in life but it should not decide about all. Thin and good lookong are often treat better by the society. They easier make a career and have bigger acclaim among their friends. Nie przecze, że poznajac druga osobe, najpierw zwracamy uwage na jej wyglad zewnetrzny(Nie wiem jak to przetłumaczyc), but it is only first look, after that on the higher place is a personality, internal beauty.
To sum up, a lot of people, certainly try their appearance, to be more atractive, but I further think that it is not so much matter.
In this day and age having a job is (a highly valid -tak się nie mówi odnośnie posiadania pracy) is very important.

There are a lot of
>(unemployeds - nie ma takiego słówka; unemployed to jest przymiotnik), whose (whose = czyj a nie którzy) dream about any work.

There are many unemployed people who dream about having a job.

For some (a working area to jest miejsce pracy w sensie biurko, biuro itp., a nie praca/stanowisko )may
>be a blessing, for another it is a curse.

For some people, work is a blessing; for others, it is a curse. What is the truth?

>Many people suggest, that appropiate work is a blessing, because it
>allows live on a heights and ensure profits.

Many people BELIEVE (albo THINK, ale nie suggest) that (przed that nie stawiamy przecinka) the right job is a blessing because it can allow people to experience a high quality of life and bring them profits.

A labour enable a
>survival many families in this hard times.
In these hard times (times to liczba mnoga więc nie może być this), a job ensures the survival of many families.

Furthermore, work is a
>benediction, especially if it could be satysfying and causes our
>develop.
benediction to co innego.

Furthemore, work is a blessing, especially if it is satisfying and enables us to develop personally and professionally.

It is believed that a lot of companies create opportunieties
>in advanced training specially for young employees.
(Więc jak: uważa się czy tak jest? Chyba tak jest. Nie lej wody z tym uważa się).

Many companies provide training opportunities, especially for young employees.


Moreover, if in
>work is enjoyable atmosphere and associate are kind and heplful job
>truely may be a blessing.
Moreover, work can truly be a blessing if the atmosphere at work is enjoyable and coworkers are kind and helpful to each other.

For many people a career become more
>significant than a family.
However, for many people, their career sometimes/often (co tam wolisz) can become more important than their family.

When that happens, is not work a curse then?


>On the other hand, a labour could be a curse, if it is a duty and
>people are not pleased for their proffesion.
Work can also be a curse if it becomes a duty and if people are not satisfied with their chosen profession.

In particular, when in
>some corporation there is a rat race, and the atmosphere is
>insufferable or workmates are greedy and jealous of appointments.
This happens especially when there is a rat race at work, the atmosphere is insufferable and coworkers are envious of others.

appointment to nie jest stanowisko pracy.

>Additionally in some work area takes place a violence or an
>exploitation.
Additionally, in some workplaces, employees may encounter violence or exploitation.

Then job become a imprecation for employers, what is
>very worrying sitauation.

impre co? an offensive word or phrase used when someone is very angry.

Then, the job becomes a curse and it is a very worrying situation.

>Even thought work is frequently hard and tiring, it is necessary.
though

In
>my opinion, our job may be a blessing if we can take from it any
>benefits.

...if we can benefit from it.
There has been a lot of discussion about THE FACT OF a suitable appearance and
everybody attachES weight to THEIR own presentation.
In my 'opnion' (ortog), 'it has not so' (co to jest?) big importance, there are more significant features in other people (ale np jakie?)
I am fully convinced that no matter if somebody is slim or fat, (tutaj cos brakuje)can be AN interesting person, who 'have' HAS many advantages. I do not agree that slimMer or prettier is better. People should not assess other (ale other co? ksiazki, papierosy?), nobody is 'not' (niepotr-to zmienia sens zdania)'a' (niepotr) ideal, everybody 'have' HAS some drawbacks.
Someone is obese, but smart and 'what is then' (nie rozumiem tego pojecia)? He 'could' SHOULD not be rejected by 'a' (niepotr) society. I believe that our populace is more and more 'eccepting' (ortog) (ale czego?) and everybody 'have' (prosze sie nauczyc i nigdy wiecej nie mylic...everybody HAS) the same chances.
To my mind, anyone will not 'being' (dlaczego 'being' tutaj BE) 'always' (zla kol slow...always BE) beautiful, thanks to 'they' THE FACT THAT THEY pay
attention 'on' TO personality traits. Frequently, people whose (ale co? mam zgadywac: nogi, rece?)'are' are pretty and clean 'limbed' (dahj inne slowo) are confident and selfish.
On the other hand, it seems that good appearance helpS in life but it should not decide about all (ale all czego?- lepsze slowo everything). Thin and good 'lookong' (ortog) (ale kot? co?) are often treatED better by the society. They 'easier make a career' (zla kol slow) and have bigger acclaim among their friends.
Nie przecze, że poznajac druga osobe, najpierw zwracamy uwage na jej wyglad zewnetrzny(I don't disagree that when meeting someone, we notice their external appearance), but it is only THE first look, after that 'on' IN A 'the' Niepotr) higher place is a personality OR THE internal beauty.
>To sum up, a lot of people, certainly try BY their appearance, to be more
>atractive, but I further think that 'it is not so much matter' (to jest blednie - THIS DOES NOT MATTER.
Dziękuję bardzo za wszelkie sugestie i poprawki, oj widzę ze jeszcze dużo pracy przede mną;/
Pozdrawiam;)
A mógłby ktoś z was zerknąć jeszcze na to opowiadanie:

Napisz opowiadanie na temat: Lost and found.

Once upon a time, during a sunny, hot Saturday Amy was sitting on her's room and was making-up. It was her wedding day. Everyone were happy and exciting, mostly a bride.
She was very nervous, after that Kathy, her best friend, told Amy about her strange dream. Kathy said: "I don't want to worry you, but in my dream, you were dressed on a black dress and Tom-your boyfriend have lost..." Amy didn't believe in power of dream, she thought Kathy as oversensitive. However she had a nasty feeling.
A hour later Amy phoned to Tom with ask, if everything was all right and if he certainly would have come to her. He affirmed her about it.
Amy (miała jeszcze tylko włożyc suknie ślubną-nie wiem jaki czas wstawiać w takich zdaniach, miala zrobic cos w przeszłosci, czyli wolud have IIIforma???)
and will waiting with Kathy for a groom. But it was too beautiful to be real.
The bride (chcąc włożyć swoja suknię, zorientowała sie ze jej nigdzie nie bylo.) "It is everything becouse of this bad dream"- she said. Girls started to look for a dress. Amy was crying and shouting. Kathy was more controlled. A moment later Tom arrived and Amy started to tell him everything. He was trying to cheer the girl, everyone were trying to found other solution.
It was ten minutes to start the celebration...
Suddenly, groom's mother opened the door and she walked into with Amy's wedding dress. She explained that she had to get it for a little correction and she forgot to phone...Amy was anxious, but more important was found dress.
She dressed in it and everyone will go to the church.
Fortunately, wedding party and all ceremony were very succesfull without an extra situation no more.
Hej? zlituje się ktoś i mi pomoże??, bo przydałoby mi się to mieć jak najszybciej
Once upon a time, during a sunny, hot Saturday Amy was sitting 'on' IN
'her's' HER room and was FIXING HER 'making-up' MAKE-UP.
Everyone 'were' WAS happy and 'exciting' EXCITED, mostly 'a' ('a' znaczy jakas tam nieznajoma mloda pani, przeciez tu wiesz o kogo chodzi THE) bride.
She was very nervous, after 'that' (niepotr) Kathy, her best friend, HAD told Amy about her strange dream. Kathy said: "I don't want to worry you, but
in my dream, you were dressed 'on' IN a black dress and Tom - your boyfriend
'have' GOT lost..." Amy didn't believe in THE power of THE dream, she thought Kathy as oversensitive.
A hour later Amy phoned 'to' (niepotr) Tom 'with ask' (kurcze, po jakiemu to jest - gdzie wy to znajdzujecie takie zdania - TO ASK), if everything was all right and if he WAS 'certainly' (zla czesc zdania, tutaj CERTAIN THAT HE would 'have' (niepotr) come to her. He 'affirmed' CONFIRMED IT. 'her about it' (niepotr).
ALL Amy (had to do was to put her wedding-dress on)and WAS TO BE 'will' (niepotr) waiting with Kathy for 'a' (znowu jakis nieznajomy czlowiek, tutaj THE) groom. But it was ALL too beautiful to be real.
The bride (wanting to put her dress on, realized that she could not find it anywhere). "'It' THIS is everything 'becouse' (gdzie to slowo znalazles? dlaczego wlasnie to piszesz blednie, kiedy dokladnie wiesz, ze tak sie nie pisze!) of this bad dream"- she said.
THE girls started to look for 'a' (jakie to 'a' - tutaj THE - czy nauczyciele juz was tego nie ucza!) dress.
He was trying to cheer the girl, everyone 'were' WAS trying to 'found' FIND ANother solution.
It was ten minutes to THE start OF the celebration...
Suddenly, THE (prosze sie nauczyc,m gdzie sie stawia 'the' bo to juz przyjemjnosci mi nie daje), groom's mother opened the door and she walked into (ale into what?) with Amy's wedding dress. She explained that she had to get it for a little correction and she forgot to phone...Amy was anxious, but more
important was THAT SHE HAD found THE dress.
She dressed 'in it' (niepotrz) and everyone 'will go' WENT to the church.
Fortunately, THE wedding party and all THE ceremony were very succesfull
without ANY 'an' (niepotr) extra 'situation no more' PROBLEMS.
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