Proszę o sprawdzenie rozprawki o fast-foodach!piln

(to jest połowa rozprawki, bo pierwszą połowę myślę,że mam w miarę dobrze)
Eating in fast-food bars is good for people who are always late,becouse it take not much time. I think that those two adventages are cause why the poeple like eat in fast-food bars.(te zalety byly wczesniej ;) )
Fast-food bars very often encourage children thanks to toys which are added to the childrens meals,know as 'happy meals'.Fast -food meals appear to be tasty but in real in big amount they are unhealthy.
In the main fast-food are high-caloric,it has much fat and carbohydrates, cuncurently it is defected in cellulose,vitamins and minerals.
Opponents of this kind of eating thinks, that consuming fast-food ic cause of sickness like arteriosclerosis, overweight, neoplastic diseases,cardiac and liv diseases.
To sum up I think that all things are for people on condition that we can benefit from it good.
Eating fast-food from time to time isn't bad but when you do it everyday it can be dangerous for your health and your slim figure.

Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie tej rozprawki, ponieważ muszę ją jutro oddać :)
Z góry dziękuję :)

Eating in fast-food bars has pros and cons. It is fast and favourable for people who are late. We get food so fast and so cheap, but at the same time we are giving up quality. The quality by which the food is produced, cooked, and served is all lowered because of its convenience to us. One example of the sacrifice we make eating fast food is the health. Take-away food is very unheatly.
Majority of fast-food is high-caloric. It has much fat and carbohydrates. Opponents of this kind of eating think that consuming fast-food cause sickness like: arteriosclerosis, overweight, neoplastic diseases,cardiac and live diseases. However, it is full of cellulose,vitamins and minerals.
Fast-food bars encourage children by toys which are added into their meal.

To sum up I think all things are for people in condition that we can benefit by it.
All in all eating fast-food from time to time is not bad but when we do it everyday it can be dangerous for our health and slim figure.






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