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I am writing to apply for the position of part-time shop assistant which was advertised in this week's Herald.
Iam an eighteen-year-old student at Layton College. I am currently taking A- level course in Business Studies, Law and Economics. I am interested in reading book and very willingly to reading them.
I have no sales experience, but I have held the position of asistant in Town Library last summer and I help out in school library twice a week. I feel that my experience with the books and working in the library and contac with readers help me to get this position.
I am consider myself to be friendly, responsibel and above all hardworking person, who is not afraid og new challenges related to work among the people. I am able to work independently, and as part of a team.
I enclose a reference from my provious job. I am avaible for interview any weekday after 3 p.m. I wolud be grateful if you would consider my application. I look hearing from you.

Yours faintfully,
Johny B.

I am writing to apply for the position of part-time shop assistant, which I SAW advertised in this week's Herald.
I am an eighteen-year-old student [raczej from] Layton College. Currently, I take A-level course in Business Studies, Law and Economics. [napisz po polsku - bo zdanie niezrozumiałe]
I have HAD no sales experience, YET I have held the position of asistant in Town Library last summer and I WAS helpING [-] in A school library twice a week AS WELL. I BELIEVE that my experience AS REGARDS the books, [-] working in the library and contacT with readers help me to get this position.
I [-] consider myself to be friendly, responsibLE and above all ELSE AN hardworking person, who is not afraid oF ANY new challenges related to work among [-] people. I am able to work independently, and as A part of a team.
I enclose a reference from my provious job. I WOULD LIKE TO BE INTERVIEWED any weekday after 3 p.m.. I HAVE TO ADMIT THAT I wolud be REALLY grateful if you would consider my application.

I look FORWARD TO hearing from you.

Yours faithfully [jakby było faintfully to by znaczyło dosłownie - Twój omdlały],
Johny B.

ja to poprawie:

Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to apply for the position of A part-time shop assistant
which was advertised in this week's Herald.
I am an 18 year old student at Layton College, CURRENTLY taking A- level courseS in Business Studies, Law and Economics. I am interested in reading bookS (bo chyba wiecej jak jednego) and I very willingly 'to reading' READ them.
I have no DIRECT sales experience, but I 'have' (niepotr) held the position of AN asistant in THE Town Library last summer and I helpED out in THE school library twice a week. I feel that my experience with 'the' (niepotr) books 'and' WHEN working in the library and contacT with readers WILL help me to get this position.
I 'am' (po co slowo 'am'?) consider myself to be friendly, 'responsibel' (ej- popraw to ortog) and above all A hard-working person, who is not afraid 'og' OF new challenges related to work among the people.

I enclose a reference from my 'provious' (ortog) 'job' (nie, tutaj musi byc employer). I am 'avaible' (ortog) for interview any week day after 3 p.m.

I 'wolud' (ortog) be grateful if you would consider my application.

I look FORWARD TO hearing from you.

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