Opowiadanie "The holiday of a lifetime" sprawdzeni

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PROSZĘ o sprawdzenie mi tego opowiadania. Zależy mi na ocenie i to bardzo, będzie miała wpływ na ocenę końcową, a nie umiem dobrze pisać po angielsku. Nie wiem czy dobrze użyłam czasów. Muszę używać Past Simple, moze Past Perfect. Drugie to trzeba wcisnąć kilka idiomów angielskich. Nie wiem czy dobrze je wpisałam, no i jakieś konstrukcje z przymiotnikami i przysłówkami. to moje pierwsze opwiadanie i nie wiem czy wogóle się nadaje? :( Może za krótkie albo za długie?
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I hadn’t got any plan for last holiday, so I decided to organize a trip to the forest with my friends. It was very hot and windy. The weather was perfect for our trip. At heart felt it was an unforgettable adventure.

The scenery was picturesque. And everything would be well until one of us had lost the compass. Nevertheless we continued our trip. After several hours we decided to back, but knew were not the direction. The sky was full of dark clouds and soon it started raining heavily. We gnashed teeth our with cold. I tried to call home, but I've lost my phone. I was a babe in the woods. Suddenly we heard snarl. We turned around with bated breath.

We saw pairs of eyes. We scared to death. "Run!" - I heard. Fluent as quickly as I could. I felt the branches of trees and hurt my hands. I had no idea how long the run. Suddenly I fell down. When I lifted up my eyes I saw my friends and a police officer. "A friend in need is a friend indeed" - he said. I grinned and I was much happier.

After we backed we felt a fairly well. All's well that ends well.
During the rest of the holiday made even more such trips. It was fantastic time with a lot of adventures.
OK, pomożemy Ci, bo widze, że jesteś osobą, której zależy i szkoda, że coraz rzadziej na tym forum takich osób nie ma ;)
Dzięki:) jeszcze tam przed tym 2 akapitem, może by wcisnąć: We set off at the track of dawn tomorrow. ? Taki idiom:)
a wogóle to ten drugi akapit to się powinien tak zaczynać, nie wiem coś mi się źle wkleiło: We took compass, maps and all necessary things. We set off at the crack of dawn tomorrow.
I DIdn't HAVE any plan (l.mn) for MY last holiday, so I decided to organize a (HIKING? CAMPING?) trip to the forest with my friends. It was very hot and windy. The weather was perfect for our trip. At heart (zle slowo, nie rozumiem) felt it was an unforgettable adventure.

The scenery was picturesque. And everything would HAVE BEEN FINE until one of us lost the compass. Nevertheless, we continued our trip. After several hours we decided to (GO? TURN?) back, but WE were not SURE OF the direction. The sky was full of dark clouds and soon it started raining heavily. OUR teeth CHATTERED BECAUSE OF THE > cold. I tried to call home, but I
>I didn't have any planS for MY last holiday, so I decided to go on an excursion to the forest with my BEST friends.

>THAT DAY was very hot and WINDLESS so the weather CONDITIONS SEEMED TO BE perfect for our trip.
After several hours we decided to ( just 'COME BACK' or as siuniab said: 'GO BACK' ), >but WE were not SURE OF the direction< - great idea ;)

I would add: just 'but we lost our path', but your sentence is imcomparable better :)
The scenery was picturesque and BREATHTAKING.

And everything WAS GOING TO BE ALRIGHT until one of us lost the compass.
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