czy ktoś mógłby mi sprawdzić zadanie? prosze :)

jestem kiepska w pisaniu wypracowań z ang i bardzo proszę o pomoc. Z góry dziękuje :)

It was happened on last holiday. Kate spent summer with her friends in France. She was really excited, because it was her first holidays without parents. Kate was a beauty girl. Her hobby was reading and sightseeing and her the biggest dream was visited France, particularly Paris.
They spent week in Paris and week in small seaside resort. In Paris the majority time they spent on sightseeing. But second week they had on relax. One day when they spent time on the beach. The weather was out of the ordinary, but suddenly it was clouding over and started rain. All people quick run to the hotel. Kate in one moment wasn’t know what was happened. So she also started run in the hotel. Hastily she trip up and fall in a big hole. She wasn’t know where she was. It was strange places, looked like a big garden. Everything was magic, but nowhere Kate wasn’t see human. However there were many rabbits. Kate was really surprised when one of them started talking. All rabbits could talk! Rabbits told her about their magical world and life. They permit her waited storm and helped her come back to the hotel. It was handsome survival for Kate, but she knew she could never tell anyone, because they would never believe her.

Bardzo Was proszę pomóżcie mi, najbardziej chodzi mi o poprawę czasów.

It was happened 'on' (napisz DURING) last holiday.
She was really excited, because it was her first 'holidays' (daj tutaj HOLIDAY, dlastego ze napisalas 'it'-l. poj) without HER parents. Kate was a 'beauty' (zla czesc zdania, tutaj BEAUTIFUL) girl. Her hobby was reading and sightseeing and FOR her the biggest dream was 'visited' TO VISIT France, particularly
Paris.
They spent A week in Paris and A week in A small seaside resort. In Paris
the majority OF THE time they spent on sightseeing. But IN second week they 'had
on relax' (to jest niegram.. napisz RELAXED. One day 'when' (nie rozumiem co to slowo tutaj robi?) they spent SOME time on the beach. The weather was
out of the ordinary, but suddenly it 'was clouding' CLOUDED over and started
TO rain. All THE people 'quick' (zla czesc zdania) 'run' RAN to the hotel. Kate in one moment 'wasn't' DIDN'T know what 'was happened' (niegram, HAD HAPPENED). So she also started TOo run 'in' ('w' hotel? nie, tutaj TO) the hotel. Hastily
she 'trip' (zly czas-simple past) up and 'fall' FELL in a big hole. She 'wasn't' (zle uzywasz to slowo, tutaj DIDN'T know where she was. It
was A strange 'places' (tutaj ma byc l. poj), IT looked like a big garden. Everything was 'magic' (zla czesc zdania), but 'nowhere Kate wasn't see human' (tu jest zla kol slow i nie gram..Kate DIDN'T see...). .
All THE rabbits could talk!
They 'permit' (zla czesc zdania, i zle slowo, uzyj ALLOEWED) her TO WAIT 'waited' (niepotr) OUT THE storm and helped her TO come back to the
hotel. It was 'handsome' (zle slowo) survival for Kate, but she knew she could never tell anyone, because they would never believe her.

sorry, zauwazylam, tam ma byc ALLOWED

bardzo dziękuję :)