Proszę o sprawdzenie. Pilne

Proszę bardzo o sprawdzenie wypracowania. I sprawdzenie czy forma jest zgodna z formą opowiadania. Opowiadanie miało być o tym jak podczas wakacji udało nam się ujść z życiem

Last summer with my friends we had an idea to went for a few days trip. We wanted to go somewhere by bike and sleep in tents. Finally we had choose the best place and packed all the necessary things before we went for our trip.
The first few days were amazing. The weather was good and fostered our sightseeing and holiday adventures. We visited many interesting places like castles, national parks. Every night we did outbreak. We slept in tents and the next day we continued our trip.
One night, when we slept the strange things happened. We heard some strange voice, so we all felt frightened. Early morning we decided to check out what happened last night. To our surprise near this place, where we slept was a huge zoo. We hadn’t seen it before.
As it turned last night one lion, which lived there run away. We were all scared and shocked.
Suddenly we heard roar. When we turned we saw predator. He looked straight at us. Immediately we realized we were trapped. We all waited and thought what lion can do. Suddenly he straightened up and ran straight at us. When we thought that we all die then we heard the shot and the beast fell just in front of us. Quickly gave us support the zoo owner. He called to our parents because we wanted to come back home. After we came back we felt exhausted. During the rest holiday we didn’t make more trips like that, because we wanted life. All situation was for us a narrow escape

Last summer with my friends we had an idea to 'went' GO for a 'few days
trip' (napisz to inaczej...for a trip lasting few days).
Finally we 'had choose' (zle, tutaj CHOSE the best place and packed all the necessary things before we went for our trip.
Every night 'we did outbreak' (tego nie rozumiem).
One night, when we slept 'the'(niepotr) strange things happened.
As it turned OUT 'last' (napisz 'the previous') night one lion, which lived there HAD run away.
Suddenly we heard A roar. When we turned ROUND we saw THE predator.
We all waited and thought what A lion 'can' COULD do.
When we thought that we WOULD all die then we heard 'the' A shot and the beast fell just in front of us.
Quickly gave us support the zoo owner' (napisz to zdanie inaczej...The zoo owner quickly...). He called 'to' (niepotr) our parents because we wanted to 'come' GO back home.
During the rest holiday we didn't 'make' GO ON ANYmore trips like that, because we wanted 'life' (to jest bardzo poetycznie - I want life' ale tutaj lepiej...we wanted to live). 'All' THE WHOLE situation was for us a narrow escape.