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“Adolescence is the unhappiest time in most people’s lives”


Adolescence it is period between 12 to 16 year old. Many people think so it is the happiest time in their lives, and a lot says so it is the unhappiest time. How is there really? In my essay I will try to find answer on this question.

First of all we begin to be older people and we can do more things. Adolescence is a very carefree time in our lives. We met our first love and we begin to learn in our mistakes. A lot of boys are excited by their beard.


On the other hand our body is changing. We have got acne on our body and it is unpleasantly. We begin to arguing with our family and friends and this leads to communication problems. Sometimes we are very aggressive towards other people. We begin experimenting with stimulants with sometimes ends badly.


To sum up adolescence is not the unhappiest time in life. We started to be adult and we do not have much worries about money and work. I think that it is a time to party and good time to enjoy existence and know yourself better.

Adolescence 'it is' (nie, nie tak, popraw) THE period between 12 to 16 'year old' (niepotr). Many people think 'so' (co to niby to 'so' tutaj robi?- napisz to wyraznie) it is the happiest time in their lives, and 'a lot says' (a lot to odnosi sie do l. mnogiej, dlaczego dajesz koncowke czasownika 3os.l.poj) 'so' (co to jest z tym 'so' nie uzywaj tego, dopuki sie nie nauczysz jak to sie uzywa) it is the unhappiest time. 'How is there really?' (to nie jest zdanie i to co napisalas jest bez sensu) In my essay I will try to find AM answer 'on' (co to niby jest- kalka z polskiego - napisz to wg ang gramatyki) this question.
First of all 'we begin to be older people' (nie,m to nie jest prawda, ja zaczelam byc dzieckiem first, a wtedy older ) and we can do more things.
We 'met' (tutaj czas teraz) our first love and we begin to learn 'in' (w? o czym ty piszesz napisz FROM) our mistakes.
...boys - BEARDS - liczba mnoga
We have got acne 'on our body' (na wszystkich czesciach ciala, na nogach tez?) and it is 'unpleasantly' (zla czesc zdania) . We begin to 'arguing' (zla czesc zdania) with our family and friends and this leads to communication problems. We begin experimenting with stimulants 'with' (calkowicie zle slowo) sometimes ends badly.
To sum up adolescence is not the unhappiest time in (ale czyje? twoje? moje?) life. We 'started' (zly czesc zdania) to be AN adult and we do not have much worries about money and work.

Poprawiłem ale nie wiem co zrobić z tym unpleasantly i arguing. Jak mógłny ktoś jeszcze to przejrzeć i napisać coś więcej to było by miło.

Adolescence is the period between 12 to 16 year old. Many people think that it is the happiest time in their lives, and many say so it is the unhappiest time. Is it true? In my essay I will try to find an answer for this question.

First of all we begin to be older people and we can do more things. Adolescence is a very carefree time in our lives. We meet our first love and we begin to learn from our mistakes. A lot of boys are excited by their beards.


On the other hand our body is changing. We have got acne on our face and it is unpleasantly. We begin to argue with our family and friends and this leads to communication problems. Sometimes we are very aggressive towards other people. We begin experimenting with stimulants what sometimes ends badly.


To sum up adolescence is not the unhappiest time in our life. We begin to be an adult and we do not have much worries about money and work. I think that it is a time to party and good time to enjoy existence and know yourself better.

Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie, potrzebne jest mi to na jutro.

Tylko propozycje:
Mason, 'unpleasantly' is an adverb. Pomysl troche. Argue juz dobrze.
'We' l.mnoga, 'an adult' l.poj, cos nie tak.
'... we begin to be' zmien 'be' na inne /rowniez zaczyna sie na be..../
...time OF our lives...